General Chat Thread

[Starshine 16,333]

 

Is anyone afraid of needles? If you are then this will probably give you nightmares. Even if you aren't it might have the same effect.

That's no needle, that's a freaking prison shank

 

 

Okay, I need my rest. Goodnight folks.

Good night

[Modphase 1,271]

If it's messed up, I can fix it. Just lead me to an image you want to use.

No it's alright. I can resize it, it's just if I did it wouldn't be the proper resolution or Rarity's fabulous mohawk would be cropped out.

Edited April 3, 2013 by Modphase

[NewCalamity 3,454]

Okay, I need my rest. Goodnight folks.

 

Nighty night, Bari.

 

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My my, that tournament is getting rather heated lately, isn't it? hoho

[Jinx 2,292]

 

That particular needle point looks too big to penetrate skin, but I'm sure it would be able to give a nasty bruise.

 

Too big to penetrate skin eh? You're just not pressing hard enough.

 

 

That's no needle, that's a freaking prison shank

 

It would be a shame to waste any blood, we need to get it all out of there.

 

 

No it's alright. I can resize it, it's just if I did it wouldn't be the proper resolution or Rarity's fabulous mohawk would be cropped out.

 

I see, I see.

[~Chaotic Parsley~ 240]

STUPID BUCK STUPID!

 

Now I gotta repurchase my tickets >_<

[Starshine 16,333]

@@Modphase, Try this one?

 

 

 

My my, that tournament is getting rather heated lately, isn't it? hoho

No need to prepare the water cannon, they only have muffins and pies to throw around :V

 

 

It would be a shame to waste any blood, we need to get it all out of there.

Fabius Bile have a better syringe :3

 

[Modphase 1,271]

Too big to penetrate skin eh? You're just not pressing hard enough.

 

I can't imagine being able to apply that much pressure with that in your teeth, but I guess you're right there, especially with Nurse Redheart being crazy and all that, she might be able too. Imagine what you can do with it if you used magic.

 

@@Modphase, Try this one?

 

I might actually use that. Thank you.

[Jinx 2,292]

 

Fabius Bile have a better syringe :3

 

My arm hurts for some reason now. Although if I got punctured there, it would probably go through the entire arm.

 

 

I can't imagine being able to apply that much pressure with that in your teeth, but I guess you're right there, especially with Nurse Redheart being crazy and all that, she might be able too. Imagine what you can do with it if you used magic.

 

Anything is possible when the patient is strapped down onto a table, or into a chair. Teeth wouldn't work so well, the needle at least has a point of some sort.

 

When in doubt, stick them with the pointy end.

[Modphase 1,271]

Anything is possible when the patient is strapped down onto a table, or into a chair. Teeth wouldn't work so well, the needle at least has a point of some sort.

 

When in doubt, stick them with the pointy end.

 

I meant when she has the needle in her teeth and want's to apply pressure with it.

 

Either way you look at it, needles are scary.

 

Anyone wanna find the hay in the needle stack?

[Hawk Moth 390]

Typically, it's best to give some hint of the world and slowly reveal it over time. At least, that's how book I've read normally go.

 

 Why do you feel like that, guy? Maybe you should try to lay down some roots. Well, I guess that's what you're trying to do.

Well on my last forum I felt like the "writer guy" and if I can share my ideas with you all, it would make me feel like you all know me. It's that my ideas represent who I am as a person. The closest (and curiously most relevant) way I can describe it is that if I was a pony, I'd have a writing cutie mark. I've just felt out of sorts lately, and I want a reason to keep coming back here.

 

In terms of the story, I think I'll post my earlier ones first. They take place in the present. The only problem is that I haven't written enough in my world. The idea is that I write short stories that take place there, and the more stories that get written the more you know about the world. I guess I'll add some pertinent world information to the foreword.

 

Dudeeeeee... You don't need to be an artist or a writer to fit in here. You don't need to do anything special. Just be friendly and I'm sure everyone will accept you nicely.

 Refer to the above post for why I want to post my stuff here.

 

Tip: Start with a corner of your world that doesn't need much information, and use the character's interactions to explain your world. Plunging straight to a scene that is a part of something big (like in your work, a war), is very hard to do without getting the reader tad confused. Try with the soldiers starting out in the barrack, give them a scene that basically tells the reader on where they are, what nation they are in, what kind of war (evil vs good? just your usual war for territory?)

I'd like to do that, but when I started the story, my plan was to go straight into the action and elucidate from there. Wait until I write the second chapter and see if it makes more sense. Thanks for talking about this with me though.

 

Or... you can just use the current chp 1, but give the screaming rat with glasses more speech role, have him reminding the Singer about why his country/kingdom needs his service. That's a good way to inform the readers on why they are marching.

 That's good. I like that idea. I can add more in. After all, marching forward presents itself for lots of dialogue options.

 

And this part, you can have the Pike Goodforth do the speaking. To put more emphasis that he is indeed a man with higher rank than Singer.

Well technically, Singer isn't even allowed to speak. That's why Goodforth's verbal lashings are so torturous. You can't talk back.

 

How do you like this for an idea: Goodforth has an inferiority complex, (well that was already there) and he expresses it by trying to tout his superiority, even though a pike is this nation's equivalent of sergeant. He's not an officer, but he wishes he was one.

 

I also want to cultivate a tone of complete disrespect, where the officers think absolutely nothing of the enlisted men.

[Starshine 16,333]

 

*whoop*

 

All hell broke loose

 

 

Refer to the above post for why I want to post my stuff here.

My point still stand, you don't really have to squeeze your creative muscles to feel that you belong to this community :V

 

 

I'd like to do that, but when I started the story, my plan was to go straight into the action and elucidate from there. Wait until I write the second chapter and see if it makes more sense. Thanks for talking about this with me though.

Well, if your plan is to make things clearer by the 2nd chapter, better smash chapter one and two together, or at least put them up together so readers doesn't have to wait to know why things happening

 

I already followed your thread, but if you can post here for any update it would be nice.

 

 

Well technically, Singer isn't even allowed to speak. That's why Goodforth's verbal lashings are so torturous. You can't talk back.

That's a detail you would need to add into the story :V

 

Using the 3rd and 2nd or the weapon as a rank indicator is a good idea, but sometimes tricky details like that can escape readers' mind

 

 

How do you like this for an idea: Goodforth has an inferiority complex, (well that was already there) and he expresses it by trying to tout his superiority, even though a pike is this nation's equivalent of sergeant. He's not an officer, but he wishes he was one.

 

I also want to cultivate a tone of complete disrespect, where the officers think absolutely nothing of the enlisted men.

That's kind of hard to do, I don't really know how to do it myself, so good luck with that :x

But it's a good idea though. It adds a lot to the story's dynamics.

[Modphase 1,271]

I'm going to go to bed. I'll see you fellows on the morrow. Good night.

 

 

 

 

 

[Hawk Moth 390]

My point still stand, you don't really have to squeeze your creative muscles to feel that you belong to this community :V

It's my way of showing who I am, and it does feel like planting roots. You don't hold it against me do you?

 

 

Well, if your plan is to make things clearer by the 2nd chapter, better smash chapter one and two together, or at least put them up together so readers does

n't have to wait to know why things happening

I already followed your thread, but if you can post here for any update it would be nice.

 

The chapters work in pairs. The name, "Heron and Fox" refers to two characters. Sev is one, and the other is a character named Heron Connover. Though you're right that I need to elucidate more in the first chapter. I'll throw in some more information.

 

Also, I'll be sure to post update information here.

 

That's a detail you would need to add into the story :V

 

Using the 3rd and 2nd or the weapon as a rank indicator is a good idea, but sometimes tricky details like that can escape readers' mind

It will be added.

 

Also, is it not clear enough that 3rd Spear is a low rank? I had a sentence dedicated to explaining that. Regardless, I'm not going to give in and remove my original ranking system. Things like that make the world unique.

 

That's kind of hard to do, I don't really know how to do it myself, so good luck with that :x

But it's a good idea though. It adds a lot to the story's dynamics.

What's hard? Creating a tone of disrespect for the soldiers? 'Das easy mate!

[Starshine 16,333]

 

I'm going to go to bed. I'll see you fellows on the morrow. Good night.

Good night

 

 

It's my way of showing who I am, and it does feel like planting roots. You don't hold it against me do you?

Nope. But I will definitely hold it against you if you think that people here will think less of you if you don't contribute anything :3

 

 

The chapters work in pairs. The name, "Heron and Fox" refers to two characters. Sev is one, and the other is a character named Heron Connover.

Ah... I thought the Fox was his wife or something

 

 

Also, is it not clear enough that 3rd Spear is a low rank? I had a sentence dedicated to explaining that. Regardless, I'm not going to give in and remove my original ranking system. Things like that make the world unique.

In some places the higher the number, the better it is, so 2 and 3 will have a better rank than 1. You can put some "yes sir" dialogues to clear things up.

 

 

What's hard? Creating a tone of disrespect for the soldiers? 'Das easy mate!

My writing style is a bit more about the environmental details and inner monologues rather than the subtle hints in dialogues. I have a hard time conveying hidden messages in speeches, still learning there

[Hawk Moth 390]

Nope. But I will definitely hold it against you if you think that people here will think less of you if you don't contribute anything :3

I'd just like to contribute. Okay? I'm a writer, and that defines me as a person.

 

 

Ah... I thought the Fox was his wife or something

Fox refers to Sev Singer's name. Singe is the word for "fox" in the old language of that nation. It's something that will be explained in the story. 

 

In some places the higher the number, the better it is, so 2 and 3 will have a better rank than 1. You can put some "yes sir" dialogues to clear things up.

Oh, I see what you mean. I'll be sure to make that stuff more clear.

 

 

My writing style is a bit more about the environmental details and inner monologues rather than the subtle hints in dialogues. I have a hard time conveying hidden messages in speeches, still learning there

We all have our different styles. I'll respect yours if you respect mine. :3

[Starshine 16,333]

 

We all have our different styles. I'll respect yours if you respect mine. :3

Fair enough

 

 

 

Fox refers to Sev Singer's name. Singe is the word for "fox" in the old language of that nation. It's something that will be explained in the story.

That's mighty convoluted just for a title

 

Say, why don't you write a mlp fanfiction in the 1st place? That kind of thing, if well-written, can instantly lands you on the spotlight. I've seen a much worse writer got his story praised like crazy in this place.

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Please tell me this is not true

 

Please, be it a cruel joke, just a handiwork of someone with too many times on his hand and a pirated copy of photoshop, and not someone out there actually made all of... that

 

Oh lord...

 

Enough internet for me today

[Sweet Dreams 1,893]

Hi!

[aRegularPony 306]

Hi!

Hi new person.

[Sweet Dreams 1,893]

Hi new person.

Hi, probably not so new person. 

Lemme ask you something. How do I get to be a squirrel? Cause I'm a blank flank.

[aRegularPony 306]

Hi, probably not so new person. 

Lemme ask you something. How do I get to be a squirrel? Cause I'm a blank flank.

You post in more threads. but, these kinds of threads don't count. :/

[Sweet Dreams 1,893]

You post in more threads. but, these kinds of threads don't count. :/

Which do? 

[aRegularPony 306]

Which do? 

I honestly don't know. I just reply to threads at random when they pique my interest.

[Sweet Dreams 1,893]

I honestly don't know. I just reply to threads at random when they pique my interest.

Ok then. Thanks

[Jinx 2,292]

 

Which do?

 

Everything in the Cloudsdale Colosseum sub-forum doesn't count towards post count.

[Sweet Dreams 1,893]

Everything in the Cloudsdale Colosseum sub-forum doesn't count towards post count.

Ok. Thanks!