The Villain

[Akemi Homura 7,680]

This is a story I`ve been meaning to write for a while now. It`s a oneshot. I posted it on FIMfiction -- it might need to pass approval first. Enjoy! I`m done writing it.

 

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/14142/The-Villain

[I used to be a stranger 7,989]

"Textbook" bad would mean it was regular or predictably bad.

 

"Man" or reference to human demonyms is typically avoided if at all possible unless humans have direct bearing on the story.

[GrooveBroove 680]

I'll give it a read and let you know how I like it!

 

Just got done reading it.

Gotta say it caught me a bit off guard for the tone of it, but there isn't anything wrong with it.

 

I actually liked you depicting the Mane 6 being so hurtful, thus causing his change.

While it was indeed short, i'd be interested in seeing this idea more elaborated on.

 

Honestly my complaint would be it was to short.

Not something I really say, but I would have been interested to get more info about just about everything in general.

 

Keep It UP!

[Akemi Homura 7,680]

"Man" or reference to human demonyms is typically avoided if at all possible unless humans have direct bearing on the story.

 

I only used it since the show uses terms such as "girl" and "boy" instead of using colt or filly all the time.