wow that gave me shivers, that is very good wighting, but i feel that you jump here and there a bit too much it was knida hard to follow the plot but other then that it is really good! keep up the good work
I question why you would even start with "it might sound weird but I'm a fan of the show: my little pony" when your posting this on a forum where any sane person would have to be a brony in the first place to even sign up other then like it.