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SwiftDust in Manehattan

 

I've been wanting to try drawing skyscrapers to practice on perspectives, and tidbits of details here and there for a new wallpaper for my phone's homescreen; I thought of Manehattan right away.

I have an OC, named SwiftDust, who is living in the big city, so I thought of him being a great start in making a project like this. And here we have Swift in his usual early morning scene, starting up with a coffee drink, still in his black pajamas while watching the sunrise.

 

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What do you guys think?  :) 

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That looks really good. I have no idea how to critique art (sorry!) but I like it.

It's alright  ^_^  I'm glad you like my art anyways~  :)

Beautiful! I especially love the background. One side of me thinks 'Eh, his muzzle is a bit odd' but then I notice it really isn't even bad. I like his colors too

Thanks so much :lol: I'm glad you like the effort i put into this x33

Yeah, I also thought of that same thing too when I was drawing this one, but it doesn't seem distracting at all  ^_^

It was tough to pick the right color palette of SwiftDust to be honest, mostly because he's a red pegasus, and I find red ponies hard to have the right color combinations while trying to make him unique from other red ponies in the show and fandom.

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It's alright  ^_^  I'm glad you like my art anyways~  :)

Thanks so much :lol: I'm glad you like the effort i put into this x33

Yeah, I also thought of that same thing too when I was drawing this one, but it doesn't seem distracting at all  ^_^

It was tough to pick the right color palette of SwiftDust to be honest, mostly because he's a red pegasus, and I find red ponies hard to have the right color combinations while trying to make him unique from other red ponies in the show and fandom.

Are you kidding me? What you have in that picture is a awesome scheme. Just use that!

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Are you kidding me? What you have in that picture is a awesome scheme. Just use that!

Okay  :)  Well, particularly this is his final color palette after I did some revamping to his design sometime a month ago I think. So yeah x3

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Awesome drawing man.

although his shirt looks a little more black dress shirt than pajamas, great drawing.

I'm glad you like the drawing~  :lol:

Hmm.. yeah, it does look more like a shirt x3

I think I call it a 'pajamas' because he only wears that black, long-sleeved polo shirt for sleeping at night  ^_^

He's an OC of mine who constantly wear clothes, usually anything that's black, so he'd wear something different in the day and every event else.  :)

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SwiftDust in Manehattan

 

I've been wanting to try drawing skyscrapers to practice on perspectives, and tidbits of details here and there for a new wallpaper for my phone's homescreen; I thought of Manehattan right away.

I have an OC, named SwiftDust, who is living in the big city, so I thought of him being a great start in making a project like this. And here we have Swift in his usual early morning scene, starting up with a coffee drink, still in his black pajamas while watching the sunrise.

 

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What do you guys think?  :) 

My casual side says "This is awesome!"

 

However, my detail-picky side says the following:

 

  • The muzzle does not have any depth to it. Because of the shading done, it seems like the muzzle is flat. There needs to be adjustment with shading in order to make it realistic with the direction of the lighting.
  • If one looks closer to the reflection in the window, it is clearly shown that it is a copy of the pony from the side which the light is not shown as much. The reflection should have a difference in which there is more lighting(less shading) on the hand of the pony and maybe a bit more brightness.
  • From an artistic perspective, two lines or curves should never be touching. The curves from the steam of the coffee are in line with the curves on the jacket of the pony. This is a big no-no in the artistic world.
  • From what the angle of the light source appears, there should be a bit more shadowing on the right arm of the pony in reference to the other arm which seems to have some cover over it(again from what the light source appears).
  • The end of the tail(or close to it) should not have as much lighting as the part being exposed to the lighting. It is clearly in a shading zone because of its positioning related to the light source.
  • The shading near the top of the ponies neck is not quite right. It somewhat makes the neck much more thick than it should be.
  • There should be some shadowing from the coffee cup upon the chest of the pony because of the position and the reference of the light source.
  • Some other small details that could be fixed.

Other than that, it looks awesome. :D

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That's a nice-looking OC. I noticed his manestyle looks similar to mine. I really admire the level of detail here, though I just can't get the thought out of my head that the shape of his muzzle makes him look like he just pulled his face out of a tin can.  :lol: My apologies.

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My casual side says "This is awesome!"

 

However, my detail-picky side says the following:

 

  • The muzzle does not have any depth to it. Because of the shading done, it seems like the muzzle is flat. There needs to be adjustment with shading in order to make it realistic with the direction of the lighting.
  • If one looks closer to the reflection in the window, it is clearly shown that it is a copy of the pony from the side which the light is not shown as much. The reflection should have a difference in which there is more lighting(less shading) on the hand of the pony and maybe a bit more brightness.
  • From an artistic perspective, two lines or curves should never be touching. The curves from the steam of the coffee are in line with the curves on the jacket of the pony. This is a big no-no in the artistic world.
  • From what the angle of the light source appears, there should be a bit more shadowing on the right arm of the pony in reference to the other arm which seems to have some cover over it(again from what the light source appears).
  • The end of the tail(or close to it) should not have as much lighting as the part being exposed to the lighting. It is clearly in a shading zone because of its positioning related to the light source.
  • The shading near the top of the ponies neck is not quite right. It somewhat makes the neck much more thick than it should be.
  • There should be some shadowing from the coffee cup upon the chest of the pony because of the position and the reference of the light source.
  • Some other small details that could be fixed.

Other than that, it looks awesome. :D

I'm just glad that you were able to critique my work to be honest.  :)   You really shared your point, and I can see some errors myself even. x3 I wish I could have done better, but I guess you may need to know that this was all done using only a computer mouse though. I don't have a tablet, so my efforts were harder when I made this. ^^;

 

I do have some reasons why the outcome resulted to that though, at least to say something about my perspectives from some of your critiques. =3

 

  • The muzzle does not have any depth to it. Because of the shading done, it seems like the muzzle is flat. There needs to be adjustment with shading in order to make it realistic with the direction of the lighting.

(I could have possibly made some twitches to correct that earlier. It took me a while to realize that it seemed to look flat to be honest. x3 However, my intentions were supposedly this; the sunlight is coming not exactly from Swift's front, but most likely more than 20 degrees to his left. The shadowing of the floor tells the direction, which is maybe why the lighting is thin on the snout part I guess, eventually it broaden out when you look from the snout to the forehead. I could have done even more light shadings to "curven" up those effects on his snout to improve it. Maybe next time I'll take more notice.  ^_^ )

  • If one looks closer to the reflection in the window, it is clearly shown that it is a copy of the pony from the side which the light is not shown as much. The reflection should have a difference in which there is more lighting(less shading) on the hand of the pony and maybe a bit more brightness.

(I wish I never had became quite lazy about this, [or I wish the computer could have kept up to avoid lags because of lots and lots of layers]. I just wished I did a little more effort on the reflection like you said, with more lighting. I knew all about this, ...but the performance was interfered a little, so I wasn't able to give my best effort on that little detail. Oh gosh ^^; I'll try harder next time. x3)

 

  • From an artistic perspective, two lines or curves should never be touching. The curves from the steam of the coffee are in line with the curves on the jacket of the pony. This is a big no-no in the artistic world.

(Honestly, I failed to understand what you really mean in this one. Did you mean that the steam line covered the curves of the jacket? What I can see is that the steam is covering the reflection of the character's jacket from the glass, not the actual one  :confused: )

  • The end of the tail(or close to it) should not have as much lighting as the part being exposed to the lighting. It is clearly in a shading zone because of its positioning related to the light source.

(I was actually trying to give off an effect where the end strands of the hair is still brightly lit because of its thinness of mass. The darkest parts are the ones in the middle, not the front and end, same goes with his mane; like this shown in this picture [http://favim.com/orig/201106/16/beautiful-girl-hair-pretty-sun-sunlight-Favim.com-78680.jpg] I guess I may have failed it to make it look convincing, but then again I tried.  ^_^ )

  • There should be some shadowing from the coffee cup upon the chest of the pony because of the position and the reference of the light source.

(Comparing to the direction of the shadows from the floor, I guess I wasn't able to do this when I was finishing the drawing ^^; I should have tried at least to add it though because it could have been a really nice shadowing effect, and emphasis  :))

 

Again, I could have tried better, but even after noticing all the errors, I'm seem satisfied myself, and I'm really glad that you are too  :lol:  Still, I really thank you for the critique. Makes me want to take notice on even more details for future projects.  :)

That's a nice-looking OC. I noticed his manestyle looks similar to mine. I really admire the level of detail here, though I just can't get the thought out of my head that the shape of his muzzle makes him look like he just pulled his face out of a tin can.  :lol: My apologies.

Well, his mane style is actually influenced from Button Mash's and Rainbow Blitz's  :) I'm glad you like my effort in this one. =3 And yeah, I'm sorry if it seems like that to some people xDD for me however, I guess I just can't really see it that way. Still, I wish I could have noticed even more. x3

I love the city in the background and the shadows around the neck line of the shirt. The shape of the muzzle is a little odd but I can't pick out why to try and describe it. Love the whole thing anyways!

Thanks so much~ =3 I'm really happy that you liked this and all =3 I wish I could have pointed that odd part of his snout myself. ^^;

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Everything about it is beautiful. The Pony, the background, the lighting, everything! Its amazing and I love it!  :lol:

Thank you so much~ ^w^  I'm really happy you enjoyed this art =3 

Awesome, really love your work. You're pretty good at backgrounds too, which is something I've been desperately trying to improve on.

I'm glad you like my buildings and stuff ^w^ It does take some time to correctly analyze perspectives. I've finished graphics class in high school and in my architecture course, so I guess that's where I knew all of making buildings. :) 

I love how he's trying to balance the mug on his leg. xP

 

Cute drawing, all the same.

Heheh, how do hooves work? XDDD Thanks a lot for liking my art anyways~! =3

It`s beautiful :D  The background is stunning :)

Thank you so much~  :lol:  I'm happy you liked my work ^w^

Nice, but amazing. It reminds me when I was going on vacation in a really nice house. Good job, and keep it up man

I'm glad you were able to like the scenery and feeling and sorts  :D  Thank you for liking my art  :)

That is such a good drawing!

Thank you~  :lol: I'm really happy you like it ^w^

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Thank you so much~ ^w^  I'm really happy you enjoyed this art =3 

I'm glad you like my buildings and stuff ^w^ It does take some time to correctly analyze perspectives. I've finished graphics class in high school and in my architecture course, so I guess that's where I knew all of making buildings. :) 

Heheh, how do hooves work? XDDD Thanks a lot for liking my art anyways~! =3

Thank you so much~  :lol:  I'm happy you liked my work ^w^

I'm glad you were able to like the scenery and feeling and sorts  :D  Thank you for liking my art  :)

Thank you~  :lol: I'm really happy you like it ^w^

You're welcome! I would like to see more! :lol:

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