Oc Color/Design Feedback Help

[Tao 7,756]

So I was wondering if you nice souls might give me some feedback on the colors and design,  this is a rough just to let you know and not the last wrap up.

 

Name: Jewelfire

Talent: Forging/Black Smith

Age:  23

Twin Sister: Teal Surge

 

Pony Maker:

 

 

Mostly just colors and such a bit used.

 

Redone by Me:

 

[Jellyfish 135]

Are her lines supposed to be weird colors in the second one?

[LordSwinton 759]

The yellow outline doesn't really do it. Maybe try a colour that is less bright

Edited July 9, 2015 by Swinton

[Tao 7,756]

Are her lines supposed to be weird colors in the second one?

 

The yellow outline doesn't really do it. Maybe try a colour that is less bright

 

Its just a rough, im looking for her main colors like body and mane and tail and etc.

[PoisonClaw 8,164]

Colors look fine to me. I was wondering why the eyes were different colors between the two, but I guess it doesn't matter because I think the yellow eyes work better.

[Summer Breeze 2,528]

I love the collor scheme, its just like mine but mines are a verry light version of your collors i think they match really good!

[LordSwinton 759]

Its just a rough, im looking for her main colors like body and mane and tail and etc.

In that case it's fine! Looks okay to me!

[Tao 7,756]

Colors look fine to me. I was wondering why the eyes were different colors between the two, but I guess it doesn't matter because I think the yellow eyes work better.

 

Yah it was a bit of a change i thought to make given her bright colors.

 

I love the collor scheme, its just like mine but mines are a verry light version of your collors i think they match really good!

Thanks,  never used pink before to much.

 

 

 

 

Thanks

[Nyan Neon 50]

Did you think about her personality before or after designing her? Because she doesn't look like a blacksmith 

I like her mane and tail in the redone version, but the colors look better in the pony creator one. Also, try not to make her mane a pure white, I suggest making it at least a little less bright and saturated, if you get what i'm trying to say 

She's pretty cute though 

[Tao 7,756]

Did you think about her personality before or after designing her? Because she doesn't look like a blacksmith 

I like her mane and tail in the redone version, but the colors look better in the pony creator one. Also, try not to make her mane a pure white, I suggest making it at least a little less bright and saturated, if you get what i'm trying to say 

She's pretty cute though 

 

She has a talent with fire while her sister has a talent with water so a smith seemed like her and her deign is still rough a bit.  I tended to think of the woman smith from  A Knight's Tale when it comes to Jewelfire.  Toning down the mane and tail in the white is a good idea and ill play around with some grays a bit or lavenders!

[Inactive Account 2 18]

From a darling named 'Jewelfire' she definetly lacks both jewels and especially fire. Also, the plain FFFFFF white is a big no-no, you should never use that. Instead, try something that will completement that pink more, and try to adjust the saturation so the teal and the pink won't be that jarring.

 

When done with that, I suggest adding some dark red somewhere for that 'fire', the headband + a ribbon on her tail could be used for having it guide one's eyes from top to bottom.

[sparkleshine100 92]

she looks a bit too refined to be a blacksmith. she looks like she would be working in sweet shop rather than hammering metal.

[Nyan Neon 50]

She has a talent with fire while her sister has a talent with water so a smith seemed like her and her deign is still rough a bit.  I tended to think of the woman smith from  A Knight's Tale when it comes to Jewelfire.  Toning down the mane and tail in the white is a good idea and ill play around with some grays a bit or lavenders!

Seems interesting. She kinda reminds me of my OC (mainly the eyes, mine also has that adorable Maud-like shape   ), and that's a good thing since I love my OC (am I biased?  ). I'd like to see how she looks with toned own colors! 

[Tao 7,756]

Seems interesting. She kinda reminds me of my OC (mainly the eyes, mine also has that adorable Maud-like shape   ), and that's a good thing since I love my OC (am I biased?  ). I'd like to see how she looks with toned own colors! 

Yah I like her eyes and thanks,  going to try a bit of a change in the mane and colors just a bit.

 

she looks a bit too refined to be a blacksmith. she looks like she would be working in sweet shop rather than hammering metal.

She is a "lady" which is the twist when it comes to Jewelfire (she has a twin sister) that how can a lady such she be a smith?  It the "don"t judge  a book by its cover" theme.

 

From a darling named 'Jewelfire' she definetly lacks both jewels and especially fire. Also, the plain FFFFFF white is a big no-no, you should never use that. Instead, try something that will completement that pink more, and try to adjust the saturation so the teal and the pink won't be that jarring.

 

When done with that, I suggest adding some dark red somewhere for that 'fire', the headband + a ribbon on her tail could be used for having it guide one's eyes from top to bottom.

 

I might do a streak of red and also the coloring of her cutie mark but no bow.  Good shoot on the white and thanks!

[Tao 7,756]

Some Redone designs on Jewelfire: 

 

[Seamore Sandwich 471]

Some Redone designs on Jewelfire: 

 

Looks good, but the hair in front of her neck looks a little odd. It might look a little better if the lines there didn't blend into the body lines, if it wraps in front of her you should space it from her just a little so you can see it curve back around, look at Rarity's mane for an example of the layering I'm referring to.