searching [OOC] Ambition for Ascension

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@Starforce Glimmer

Sorry to hear about the bad server but I’m glad you got out of it

@Loud Opinion

For me the only confusing thing is how far apart the posts are and how that makes it easier to forget the earlier parts of the story. Now, I’m not saying you should start posting every day (please don’t, I wouldn’t be able to keep up), but would a post once every week or two be plausible? That, or we could all compile a list of plot points so the story can be moved along with everyone on the same page. Those are just some possible ideas.

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@ExplosionMare

You're absolutely right. It's not fair to keep everyone waiting so long for so often. I've tried to make my posts more frequent but, in case that never comes to pass, I can at least make this RP easier to come back to with a timeline. As the GM, it can be hard for me to get in the mind of the player, so I never considered memory as a potential issue. Thanks for bringing this to my attention and giving a helpful suggestion.

I'll be doing that tomorrow seance it is very late for me.

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Alright. Their's a time-line at the bottom of the OP. Let me know if the time-line needs more or less detail.

I'll get to posting soon.

Edited May 10, 2021 by Loud Opinion

[ExplosionMare 18,065]

Thanks for making the timeline!

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9 hours ago, Starforce Glimmer said:

@Loud Opinion @ExplosionMare @abrony-mouse

Another drawing of Magnolia I had requested! I quite like this one!

Aww!! That one looks perfect!

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@ExplosionMare

I'm in the middle of writing my response.

How long do you want Starlight to read for? To read all three would take up most of the day and leave her with barely an hour before the banquet.

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Never mind, I have a lot for Starlight to work with with just one book. I'll just post and see if it'll be enough.

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@Loud Opinion

She probably won’t read for much longer, she was just waiting until there was something else to do

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I had planned to have Octavia do some things before Fuchsia catches up, but I'm feeling like dropping that so everyone can be on the same page again. How do we all feel about that?

@abrony-mouse

That being said, I have a something to clear up. I'm @'ing abrony-mouse, but this is something everyone should keep in mind. The setting is pre-industrial. Earphones are harmless, but are not on theme. Please keep this in mind to avoid confusion. You don't have to be perfect. This is another world that could have focused on different technologies. If it uses electricity or gas (that includes steam), don't imply its existence. I'll update the OP accordingly.

Edited May 19, 2021 by Loud Opinion

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@Starforce Glimmer

Remember, this is before season 4.

You do raise a good point with Vinyl. She shouldn't even exist in this cannon, let alone have those things. I'll update the OP.

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That being said, they also use candle light, quills, thatch roofs, and parchment scrolls.

Most of the modern technology shows up after season 3.

Also the theater could easily be candle light.

Edited May 19, 2021 by Loud Opinion

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Pre-industrial: Steel is expensive and requires a competent smith. Gunpowder is exotic. Electricity is exclusive to storms (Electromancy is nonexistent). The only 'automation' you're likely to see comes from rare clockwork devices that need to be manually cranked.

[Loud Opinion 602]

In the future, if you don't expect it to be related then use discord. I don't want go off topic.

That being said, do you mind if I incorporate the Blue changelings into the lore?

[Loud Opinion 602]

I see everything on discord. If I don't have a good response then I won't.

As for how I would use them, I'd say they're long-gone, but what they left behind could be of use.

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I understand. There's really no pressure. I just thought it would have made for a good environment and some extra flavor.

To explain, they wouldn't have disappeared. I'm thinking I'd look like a frozen over marsh. I already had an alternative though.

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Nevermind. You were right. Now that I think of it, the story doesn't have anything to do with the Changelings. Having a lost civilization of them would dilute the rest of what I'm going for.

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I think the Sparkle family is believable enough. Making them any more special would undermine their achievements.

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Just waiting to see if everyone else is on board with Fuchsia's fast forward.

[ExplosionMare 18,065]

@Loud Opinion
 

I’m fine with the time skip

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Sorry for the delay.

I've been meaning to clarify my last post, but kept getting distracted. Let me get that out of the way now. @abrony-mouse has been my get-out-of-jail-free card but their's really no reason to do that now that I've gotten a plan for how I'm going to handle it.

 

Anyway. I've been trying my best to word my sentences very carefully with my IC posts. The reason being that the events that take place are not intuitive. But my posts keep being misinterpreted.

@ExplosionMare

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They all began synchronously skipping in an odd pattern. Starlight’s heart rate increased again, reminding her that her heartbeat was still irregular.

The first sentence is what I want to focus on. This implies that they are all skipping at the same time as one unit. The second one was perfect. I never said that her heart rate went down, so it didn't. This is what I want.

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Their mundane traversal through the street was disorganized when their path brought them close to the balcony. Each and every pony within a few feet of her would abandon their stride to skip in line with Starlight's heart.

Then, just as suddenly, they would resume their mundane strut just as they left her range.

I used the word each to imply that everyone as an individual would skip and then stop depending on how close they are to Starlight. Imagine your on a side walk and every car that passes you up honked their horn as they did.

This case is harmless considering the point I want to get across was understood, but I'd hate for this to take away emotional impact from a scene. It's hard to get invested when people are confused as to what their characters are seeing. I don't know. Maybe corrections like these are fine. I know I didn't do a good job describing the houses everyone was staying at. Let me clear that up while I'm here.

The houses are on the far side of the curve, and each character gets a small-medium house. The balcony (which I neglected to describe) overlooks the road behind it.

Edited May 29, 2021 by Loud Opinion

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@Loud Opinion

I can go head and do some editing to try to capture more of the emotions to the scene

[Loud Opinion 602]

What are you talking about?

[ExplosionMare 18,065]

2 minutes ago, Loud Opinion said:

What are you talking about?

Didn’t you just say I read your last post a bit incorrectly? I only tweaked a couple of sentences in my last post so it shouldn’t change too much anyways.

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This case is harmless considering the point I want to get across was understood...

I was talking about future reference.

I feel like your missing the point. I was concerned with the mechanics of what is actually happening in the story. Emotionally, you post was good. You misinterpreted what was physically happening in the story.

Forgive my bluntness, but I feel like I'm being put through google translate.

[ExplosionMare 18,065]

1 minute ago, Loud Opinion said:

I was talking about future reference.

I feel like your missing the point. I was concerned with the mechanics of what is actually happening in the story. Emotionally, you post was good. You misinterpreted what was physically happening in the story.

Forgive my bluntness, but I feel like I'm being put through google translate.

Ooh, ok. I’ll read the future posts more carefully next time