Pencil Hoof 169 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 (edited) I wrote a pretty mediocre poem for English class, bit decided to share it anyway I’m Not A Little Girl. By: *cough*Pencilhoof *cough* Yes, My Little Pony. No, I’m not a little girl. The correct term is a brony. Eeyup, They’re all around the world. Yes, I know what FOX news said. The fact is they were wrong. Those rumors have been put to bed. Huh, Can’t keep us down for long. Ghost on speaks on the radio. He claims bronies are trouble. The second one who doesn’t know. Well, Now the fun’s been doubled. Ms. Magazine says she hates it. Says Lauren Faust can’t fool her. Ignorance blocks her from bliss. But We‘re 20% cooler. So media, long story short, I tip my hat, good game! You labeled us just for sport. And, We trot on just the same. LOL told you it was mediocre, oh well, i was tired :3 Edited June 18, 2012 by Pencil Hoof 12 God over games Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MachineGunLola 408 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 It's quite good actually. BANG! BANG! BANG! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
False Perception 482 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 Are you Johnathan Williams? ANYWAY...that was okay. A standard ABAB if I'm correct. I'm also too lazy to go and proof it. Swoop said: If something does happen to go horribly wrong, please, blame Zoop. Frenzyhero: Lurking extraordinaire, brony impersonator. Have a question? Mail me at frenzymlp@hotmail.com! It's just for you guys! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Victoria and Co. 782 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 I quite liked it, especially the rhymes. Rhymes are important! For some reason... This is something I do? This is something I do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pencil Hoof 169 June 18, 2012 Author Share June 18, 2012 (edited) It's quite good actually. Thanks Are you Johnathan Williams? ANYWAY...that was okay. A standard ABAB if I'm correct. I'm also too lazy to go and proof it. LOL I'm not Jonathan William, it's just a pen name I use (it's going to be posted on other forums) Well technicall it was abacb, only because of the single words between the 3 and fourth lines, but you're basically right, and thanks I quite liked it, especially the rhymes. Rhymes are important! For some reason... Thanks to you as well! Didn't expect replies to come in so quickly Edited June 18, 2012 by Pencil Hoof 1 God over games Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Victoria and Co. 782 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 Are you Johnathan Williams? ANYWAY...that was okay. A standard ABAB if I'm correct. I'm also too lazy to go and proof it. Pretty much, but some of the B's were only half-rhymes. This is something I do? This is something I do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pencil Hoof 169 June 18, 2012 Author Share June 18, 2012 Pretty much, but some of the B's were only half-rhymes. LOL only one of them And it's not my fault! Not much rhymes with cooler God over games Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Victoria and Co. 782 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 LOL only one of them And it's not my fault! Not much rhymes with cooler Don't forget about "girl" and "world" or "trouble" and "doubled." This is something I do? This is something I do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pencil Hoof 169 June 18, 2012 Author Share June 18, 2012 Don't forget about "girl" and "world" or "trouble" and "doubled." Well that's debatable since the only real problem with those are that the second rhymes end with D's, and those don't really changfe a rhymeBut i see where you're coming from! God over games Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sunny Fox 5,961 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 You should name your poem "Ballad of the Brony". Sounds 20% cooler. Anyway, thanks for this, it made my day. And it's quite good, as well. Happy minion of The Fabulous One! Signature by Midnightive Check out my blog! https://mlpforums.com/blog/1083-sunny-side-den/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Victoria and Co. 782 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 Well that's debatable since the only real problem with those are that the second rhymes end with D's, and those don't really changfe a rhyme But i see where you're coming from! *shrugpony* I'm just saying that since the final consonant sounds are different it's considered a half-rhyme.It's no big deal really, it doesn't really take much from the poem. This is something I do? This is something I do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silverguard101 8 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 amazing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flow 1,647 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 This isn't mediocre, this explains how bronies don't give up in the light of criticism, it's awesome. OCs: Flow / Love Bloom Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rainbow-Crash 101 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 This is the first pony related poem iv herd and i love love love it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pencil Hoof 169 June 18, 2012 Author Share June 18, 2012 You should name your poem "Ballad of the Brony". Sounds 20% cooler. Anyway, thanks for this, it made my day. And it's quite good, as well. Wow, I didn't expect to make anyone's day! That just made my day! This is fantastic LOL, Thank you! amazing And another thank you to you sir! This isn't mediocre, this explains how bronies don't give up in the light of criticism, it's awesome. That's exactly what it's about! Thanks! This is the first pony related poem iv herd and i love love love it Thanks for the comment, and the compliment God over games Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Awesome One 1,316 June 18, 2012 Share June 18, 2012 I was totally expecting one of those poems with the hidden meanings. This was pretty straight-forward. Good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pencil Hoof 169 February 19, 2013 Author Share February 19, 2013 I was totally expecting one of those poems with the hidden meanings. This was pretty straight-forward. Good job. *sees this almost a year later* O_O LOL sorry about that XD Thank you very much I was totally expecting one of those poems with the hidden meanings. This was pretty straight-forward. Good job. God over games Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moved ♥ 142 February 20, 2013 Share February 20, 2013 I really liked that, brony references and rhyme scheme? Just awesome. Very good job, I thoroughly enjoyed, I thought it was really funny and witty as well. ᴄᴏɴғᴇᴛᴛɪ-ᴄᴀᴋᴇ @ ᴅᴇᴠɪᴀɴᴛᴀʀᴛ.ᴄᴏᴍ Blood Orange - My OC Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pencil Hoof 169 February 20, 2013 Author Share February 20, 2013 Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it That is one of my main goals in life, to make people enjoy my writing (I want to be a writer eventually ) God over games Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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