500 Word MLP:FiM Fanfic Challenge

[Finesthour 7,287]

Seriously, dat fic.

 

Yeah ok, I'll enter. I need to get an idea, but writing comes naturally to me.

 

I'll see what I can do.

 

I told you, you cannot face the wrath that is Crona.

 

If anyone tries to copy my fic, I would laugh really hard xD

[PlunderSteed 1,252]

Done.

 

Oh, crap. It doesn't have a title. Whatevs. Titles are over-rated. Anyways, you can find it here.

[Ashbad 969]

A lot of good competition already folks. Hopefully won't discourage the less-seasoned writers from joining as well -- remember, it's all for fun!

[~Lawful Jordo~ 2,066]

Got mine done The idea has probably been done, but I'm pretty happy nonetheless It's a Luna trapped on the moon story :3

 

 

Capped at about 431 words. Critique would be much appreciated, as this is one of my first attempts at writing :3

 

Edit: The document was taken down, but My fic is on Deviantart: http://eljordo911.deviantart.com/art/The-Mare-on-the-Moon-319804710

Edited August 8, 2012 by Eljordo

[False Perception 482]

Darn. I would post, but everything I write is more along the lines of an epic...why can't you post OCs?

[Ashbad 969]

why can't you post OCs?

 

Not enough space to give them a decent background And in all honesty most OC fics turn out really horrible.

[False Perception 482]

Have you read Luna's Student? That's an OC fic, and I actually liked it.They haven't updated in awhile, and it's not finished, but it had a good concept and centered around an OC.

[Shift 4,272]

Open the spoiler, I'll put it on google documents later.

 

 

 

Thinking

 

Princess Cadence was sitting in her spiral tower, reading a dusty old book on the Lunar Republic and Solar Empire, called ‘Celestia – The Misunderstanding’. Cadence was waiting for her friend, Luna, to get here so she could (attempt) to learn how to raise the moon. In return, Cadence would attempt to show Luna her love spell. Luna said she had some royal business to attend too and would be there by 2:00. Right then, it was 1:56. Cadence let out a low sigh. Luna was always late. She went back to her book. She almost tore the book into tiny pieces at her feet from what she was reading.

 

“Chapter 1 : The Great War

Princess Luna, Sister of Princess Celestia, was very upset that her sister had gotten a pet Phoenix, but hadn’t had the time to get Luna one. Because of this, Luna created a secret organization of ponies that hated Celestia and wanted to bring down her tyrannical rule. They named themselves the ‘Lunar Republic’. In turn, Celestia made the Solar Empire. The two raged on, war after war. Around 1000 years later, Luna refused to raise the sun. Naturally, Celestia had to do something about it. She gathered the Elements of Harmony, and defeated her sister. As you can see, some call her a tyrant, but she was just doing her job – defending Celestia. The real di** is Luna. She started this whole mess. Please, call 1900-NoMoreLuna if you wish to put Luna back on the moon.

Chapter 2 : A False Friend

About a year after coming down from the moon, Luna needed a partner in crime to help defeat her sister and rule Equestria under her tyrannical rule. As much of you should know, the wedding of Princess Mi Amore Cadenza and Shining Armor has taken place. Well, Princess Luna saw opportunity at this. She called the Changeling Queen, Chrysalis, up and told her to take over Canterlot, and she would help. She helped the changeling attack! Well, after the changeling act failed, she needed more help. So she turned to the wife, Princess Mi Amore Cadenza to help her. They became the best of friends. But, little does Cadence know, Luna is using her-”

And that’s all Cadence read before tearing that book into pieces. She stormed down the spire, echoes of her stomping residing in the castle. Once she got to the bottom, the innocent face of Princess Luna was before her.

 

“You-!” Cadence yelled, throwing the book in Luna’s face. Luna rubbed her face wicked fast, and looked at the book. She picked it up, and flipped through the pages. She looked up at Cadence, a frown on her face.

 

“Well?” Cadence asked.

 

“Look at the author.” Luna replied, pointed toward the bottom of the cover.

 

The name ‘Shining Armor’ was etched there.

 

Cadence screamed, and grabbed her cell phone. Luna stared.

 

“Uh, what are you doing with that-?” Luna asked.

 

“1900-NoMoreLuna.” Cadence replied, her cell phone up to her ear.

 

 

 

 

 

Exactly 500 words. *shades* Also, it has nothing what-so-ever to do with grimdark, I think it's comedy.

Edited August 7, 2012 by Resolution

[~Lawful Jordo~ 2,066]

Challenge accepted.

Prepare to face the wrath of a Crona fic.

 

I'll probably either make you cry, or laugh.

 

Done. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m6P3u-Mp5BNJVAuH1MeZA6LsYI_W-WRWIXVvu0y3H5M/edit

 

Cronaaa, looks like I got myself some competition

 

I thought it was going to be a clopfic at fist, but the ending made me laugh.

[KPM 288]

No trollfics... Does absurd shipping count? (The likes of Rainbow Dash / Sink or Fluttershy / Bloomberg)

[Ashbad 969]

No trollfics... Does absurd shipping count? (The likes of Rainbow Dash / Sink or Fluttershy / Bloomberg)

 

No, that's fine. A trollfic is more like "Spike rammed his diddly-doo into Rarity and she collapsed into a pile of sticky flesh and he ate that and then with a black dude raped Twily in the ear and then..." you get the point.

[KPM 288]

OH WAIT. I forgot I can't write really at all. I am bad at making chapters to begin with, and low vocabulary will hit the quality hard.

[Ashbad 969]

OH WAIT. I forgot I can't write really at all. I am bad at making chapters to begin with, and low vocabulary will hit the quality hard.

 

Do the best you can, it's all for fun, remember nobody's going to make fun of you if what you make isn't up to their stanards of quality, and if they do, I'll disqualify them and report them.

[I used to be a stranger 7,993]

This post has been redacted by the author.

Edited May 3, 2021 by Blue

[cuteycindyhoney 13,307]

Need something to keep your mind off the wait for Season 3, intra-community "drama", or the fact you have ideas for short fanfics that could never be 1000 words long and therefore be accepted by FimFiction or EqD?

 

If so, enter the challenge of writing a fanfic about MLP:FiM... using only 500 words. Sounds easy? Just wait until the competition fires up!

 

Guidelines:

 

- The word count of your fanfic must be no more than 500 words, and no less than 250.

- It actually needs to be about MLP:FiM.

- No OCs.

- No Gore, Clop (GrimDark is fine as long as it's SFW)

- No trollfics. Please, just don't.

 

.. And that's about it.

 

Just a fun competition for all to enjoy! Maybe I'll judge all the posted entries once we have a lot of them to find the top 3 or so, but overall this should be a silly and fun contest.

 

 

*** Note: these won't be submittable on FimFiction, which requires all entered stories to be at least 1000 words. ***

 

Due Date: August 17th (by Noon, EST (GMT -5))

 

I'll leave you with a related quote:

 

"I'd write you something short, but I just don't have the time." ~Mark Twain

 

I have entered three online writing contests

(Huzzah, I won two of them!)

but I do not think I am capable of writing a coherent story at only five hundred words. That's hardly enough to establish the setting. How about a limit of two thousand words? That's even short for me! One of my stories that I entered in another contest, I had to ruthlessly edit to bring it in under five thousand words for that contest's limit! It about broke my heart, too!

Edited August 8, 2012 by cuteycindyhoney

[~Lawful Jordo~ 2,066]

I have entered three online writing contests

(Huzzah, I won two of them!)

but I do not think I am capable of writing a coherent story at only five hundred words. That's hardly enough to establish the setting. How about a limit of two thousand words? That's even short for me! One of my stories that I entered in another contest, I had to ruthlessly edit to bring it in under five thousand words for that contest's limit! It about broke my heart, too!

 

Not to seem like a downer, but that would be grossly unfair to those of us who have already entered our submissions :S

Edited August 8, 2012 by Eljordo

[NavelColt 22,881]

Alright well, I sort of did this all just now. So, some explanation first...

 

This is basically a 'Meanwhile, what you didn't see in the show' moment. Remember the time frame when we last see Discord with Twilight Sparkle? Discord told her 'You've got to get into the spirit of things. After all, this is your new home.' He then gleefully laughs as she tells him no. The next time you see him is at the very end of the episode, after Twilight has gone around and re-harmonized all her friends. This is a time frame between those two events. Discord ventured back to bother his old nemesis and frienemy, Celestia.

 

Little does Discord know that Celestia has already devised and executed a way to aid her student in the fight.

 

PS: Titles are the bane of my existence, so this one sucks. Meh, whatever =p Enjoy.

 

 

The Odd Couple

 

“Like dominoes, Tia. Cute, amusing dominoes.”

 

Though the voice taunting her from behind danced about in Celestia’s head like a bad migraine, the pony princess stood tall and firm, gazing out the shattered remains of a palace window. The gaping hole in the once beautiful painted glass now opened up a view of the streets of Canterlot below. Screams of horror and confusion traveled through the air in shrill tones, as the once stuck-up noble ponies of the city ran for their lives, pursued by animated objects of various sizes.

 

“It wasn’t hard,” the spirit of chaos reflected, completely unperturbed by the anarchy outside and floating about in the air. “Your ponies have some very glaring weaknesses, Tia. I was rather saddened; I was done with all but your scholarly student before they even got to the center of the maze.”

 

“You will not win, Discord. You cannot stop them with your tricks.” Celestia spoke abruptly, digging a golden-decorated hoof into the tiled floor. Her gaze demonstrated both sorrow and hate. Her kingdom, her subjects, her everything; it was burning to the ground right in front of her eyes. Not flames of smoldering wood and straw, but of god-like magic, turning the peace and harmony on its head. The mother of Equestria, alienated from her own people, unable to help them, or to save them.

 

She no longer commanded his kryptonite. To her, Discord was untouchable.

 

“Oh come now, Tia, there’s no need to huff and puff…that is, unless you plan on blowing my house down.” Discord mused, his serpentine body coiling around the princess’s. His large oafish face leveled with the majestic pony, and their eyes connected firmly. While Celestia shot daggers of pure loathing, Discord gazed back with maleficent glee.

 

“Your precious ponies have no chance, my dear.” The wizard of mayhem stated merrily, using a single claw to twirl the end of Celestia’s mane teasingly. “Even your most faithful student has given in; I saw it with my own eyes.”

 

“You underestimate the power of connection and friendship, Discord. You always did.” Celestia seethed, all at once vanishing in a burst of golden magic. A moment later, she reappeared across the room, by the wide open hallway doors. While Discord flipped his wound-up body around to look at her, the princess glared to him with a knowing frown.

 

“I have already taken measures against your tricks. Twilight Sparkle will never let her friends down, and you will do well to remember that. There will always be harmony in the souls of ponies, and it can never be extinguished by the likes of you.”

 

“Honestly, I come all the way up here to keep you company and all you can do is give me speeches.” Discord pronounced with a heavy sigh, making a silent gagging motion. “Very well then, Tia. As it so happens, I have a throne to attend to. I bid you good day.”

 

In a burst of white light, the spirit was gone.

 

Celestia smirked.

 

[~Lawful Jordo~ 2,066]

My google document has been taken down, but I managed to get my fic on Deviantart. It's a story about Luna trapped on the moon :3:

 

http://eljordo911.de...-Moon-319804710

 

I would love critique if someone would be willing :3

Edited August 8, 2012 by Eljordo

[Fghik 360]

Sounds like fun! But I won't be writing anything right now because it's almost 2 am, and I need to go to bed

 

But expect an edit sometime...you know, once I can figure out the best way to post it here...

Edited August 8, 2012 by Fghik

[Samurshy 708]

I would like to try my hand at this, I have wanted to get this idea on paper but lacked the basic motivation. Anyway here it is https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nyAaPk6aDXgZJ_qNPZCz54Do3WJbou33dQ6MOP0o3U8/edit tell me if you think it crosses the line in any way.

Edited August 8, 2012 by Bronynonymous

[Xievie 498]

Lol complaints on needing 500 words max? Come on guys! Be creative, it's not THAT hard to do!

 

Anyways, not sure if my idea of a story is a trollfic, or just plain Pinkiepie.

 

I guess I will give it a shot. Good luck, everyone!

[russellshy 16]

this is something im doing as i go along its called fluttershys reunion ps dont expect me to spell everything right or use punctuation and i dont know what an oc is

one day in ponyville fluttershy was taking a stroll in to town when all of a sudden she realized her family was coming to ponyville (fluttershy) oh dear my family will be here soon then she flew as fast as she could when she got home she saw angel(angal angel angael idk ill go with angel) the bunny tapping his foot impatiently when he saw fluttershy racing twards the semi messy home (fluttershy coming to a stop says) oh my angel you dust ill get the books soon after she started there was a knock on the door (fluttershy) who is it (unknown voice) its us (fluttershy) one second she started to panic her family was there she said to angel softly ill stall them you clean here ok angel crossed his arms in disaproval then she said you wouldent even do it for carots angel looked at her his eyes narrow then he opened hi eyes is arms unfolding and smiling (fluttershy) good then she opend the door slowly hi mom hi dad hi russellshy hi the family said in unisen (fluttershy) we should go to shugger cube corner now like right now theve got a new cupcake i want to try and youll love it mom the color is blue your favorite (mom) well that does sound nice lets go when they arive at shugger cube corner pinkie pie greets them with her party canon surprize your the hundreth people to walk in this door when she blew the party canon it frightened fluttershy she droped to the ground and yelped when she got up from the ground she said pinkie you remember my parents (pinkie) yea mr and mrs shy how are you hi russ your so big how old are you (russellshy) im 13 years old (mr shy) we heard you have new cupcakes (pinkie) *gasp* pinkie smiled and said my blue boom cupcakes will make your taste buds expload with flavor (fluttershy) they wont realy exlpoad will they (pinkie) no silly if they did i wouldent have ate five already ok pinkie well take 4 please okey dokey lokey then she went in the kitchen when she came out (#472) pinkie had 4 blue cupcakes on 4 plates here thats 4 bits please (fluttershy) here you are when tey got back to fluttershys place she opened the door the end of part 1 it had to be 500 words sorry its a cliff hanger i gots to follow rules i thanks for reading if you want more then ask

[MallaJong1 202]

My entry:

 

A Thousands Years of Friendship

 

"Hey, Princess Luna. What are you doing all the way out here?"

 

Spike noticed a dark, elegant figure standing still within the bounds of the Royal Canterlot Gardens. The iluminescence radiating from the graceful night of orb shone upon the tall allicorn in ease. A simple yet utterly ethereal scene presented itself to the young dragon as he inched ever closer. The Royal Princess of the night was quite beautiful this fine evening.

 

"Young Spike, We did not sense you." Luna turned her head, slightly startled out of her reverie. "May We ask why you are not partaking in festivities at the reception party?"

 

Spike brushed the air in front of him. "Ah, they're all having fun out there. They don't need me right now."

 

"Why do you believe there is no need for your presence?" The dark allicorn inquired.

 

"No, it's not a matter of being needed or not, Princess. I'm actually here because I was trying to get away from the noise for a bit. You know, for some peace and quiet." Spike assured with a smile.

 

"We understand, Young Spike." Looking downcast, Luna muttered in melancholy. "A change of atmosphere can do good for the soul, one might mark. A completely new environment..."

 

Spike immediately noticed the morose tone of the Princess's words. "Princess, mind me for asking, but is everything okay?"

 

The glow from Luna's starry, ever-flowing mane served as a mesmerizing centerpiece to the opaque setting.

 

With a tear sliding down her cheek, Luna sniffled. "Young Spike, it's just so hard. We-we still feel isolated in such a modern world. The times are so difficult for a being who's dwelled on the moon for one thousand years!"

 

In the middle of the precious gardens, the Royal Princess lowered her head and cried. Spike, shocked by such a development, found himself acting without much thought.

 

For the young dragon suddenly held the allicorn's head near his chest. As he softly carressed Luna's mane with an open hand, Spike whispered. "It's alright, my Princess. I'm here for you. And I'll always be here for you."

 

Tears continued to slide down the dragon's scaly chest. "Wh-what you speak of is -"

 

"I'll always be here for you, Princess." Spike held up Luna's head and stared gently into her eyes. "I can live for over a thousand years, remember? We can experience the changes of time together. Because, no matter what, I'll support you the entire way."

 

And, in a moment filled with both friendship and magic, he kissed her. As their lips came apart, Spike spoke. "I apologize, Princess. I don't know what came over me. I-I just couldn't see you cry any more."

 

Luna's eyes studied the dragon, a light visible and expansive within them. "Please, call me Luna."

 

The moon maintained its humble spotlight for the two in the middle of the garden. And like the odd pair staring at each other below, the moon smiled.

 

End

Edited August 8, 2012 by MallaJong1

[Ashbad 969]

Awesome guys, we're up to ~10 entries a day after I announced this that's some fast writing right there.

 

I'm shortly going to edit in a list of completed entries so far, so you can read what others have written with ease and without having to muck with the different pages in this fast-growing thread.

[cuteycindyhoney 13,307]

Not to seem like a downer, but that would be grossly unfair to those of us who have already entered our submissions :S

 

Not a downer at all. That's very understandable. I didn't intend to mess anything up. Maybe next time the word count limit could be a little larger. I had been working on and off again on a fanfic. (Only my second. I usually only write original stuff) I just checked the word count. It's over 1800, and the story has hardly started! LOL. It'll probably be in the 6000 range by time I finish it.