My First Song - The Forgotten

[techno915 408]

Here is my video for my first song:

 

 

The lyrics:

 

Livin' A life that nobody wants to

Everyone turning away

Then comes that someone whom you've been waiting for

Now is the time to say

 

"Why weren't you there for me?

Where have you been all my life?"

Trials and torture

No bricks or mortar

Can shield me from the world

 

Innocent humans

Aren't we all?

And yet society makes us our biggest flaw

To help us redeem our honor and name

We look for the ones who share in the pain

But be on the lookout for true imitations

Or you'll soon find yourself wondering

 

"Why weren't you there for me?

Where have you been all my life?"

Trials and torture

No bricks or mortar

Can shield me from the world

 

Sometimes you ask yourself, “Why am I here?”

That’s when I tell you “Never Fear.”

People of worse lives have conquered despair

And you, my friend, can too.

As long as you live life up to its fullest,

You will never have to say

 

"Why weren't you there for me?

Where have you been all my life?"

Trials and torture

No bricks or mortar

Can shield me from the world.

 

Basically, I would like to know your thoughts on it, if there is anything I should change, if you have an idea for the music part, etc. As stated in the topic, this is my first one, so i will accept any help I can get.

 

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techno915

[Dusty Soul 2,614]

The lyrics are awesome. The vocals seem like your whispering them though... That would be my only complaint.

[techno915 408]

The lyrics are awesome. The vocals seem like your whispering them though... That would be my only complaint.

 

I was being quite so that I wouldn't wake anyone up. I recorded it at night.

 

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techno915

[Dusty Soul 2,614]

I was being quite so that I wouldn't wake anyone up. I recorded it at night.

 

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techno915

 

Oh, I see... Well then I don't have any complaints on it. It flows really well and I love the lyrics.

[XUNUSEDXXX 3,459]

I would record it again during the day when you don't have to worry about sound restrictions. You sounded shy in this video.

[techno915 408]

I would record it again during the day when you don't have to worry about sound restrictions. You sounded shy in this video.

 

I probably will re-record it someday, but only when I'm not busy. If I do, I will post a link to this page.

 

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techno915