OC ratings here!

[♞RedLotus♞ 360]

Hello there guys, I am pretty bored and I have a lot of spare time so I thought I might as well review your OC's!

 

You might notice that there are quite a bit of these, but I think its great if you request a review from me, that way you can compare the feedback that I give you from the feedback that other people will give you! It doesn't matter if you had someone rate your OC already, its always good to get as much ratings as you can.

 

I am not going to judge your OC from personal opinion because that wouldn't be fair, instead I will judge your OC by logical reasoning. That means that I wont trash your OC just because I dont like him, I will simply give you the pros and cons instead. However, if I do like your OC, I will mention it to you.

 

I will judge based on these factors:

 

Looks: Is the character's  color scheme good? Does your character look way to much like an already made up pony? Does it look nice, or is it a messy pile of randomness?

 

Cutiemark: Does your character have a decent talent, or is he some overpowered mary sue OC that controls the planets orbit? 

 

Personality: Overall rating on his characteristics. Is he or she too common? Too many positive traits and not enough bad ones?

 

Backstory: Does his backstory sound way too familiar? Is his backstory original?

 

Some tips and opinions: My personal opinions (Which you shouldn't really listen much to, its just my prespective) as well as some tips on how to enhance your OC. 

 

And finally, a grade: S being excellent, A being great, B being good, C being average, D being below average, and F being failing. (My opinions wont affect your grade.)

 

I will try to reply as soon as I can, so go ahead and request those reviews!

[Fender 1,283]

I have 5 OC's in my signature, go for it! It might take awhile, but it should keep you quite a bit...very, busy. Hope you can find something good in them.

[~Silver Essence~ 2,625]

Yeah, why not, I always enjoy what others think of my OC.

 

My OC is in the link under my signature.

 

As a note, his backstory behind his cutie mark is yet to be explained.

 

Enjoy.

[Naught Important 434]

I would like you to rate the second OC in my signature, whose name is Darling.

So far, she has been getting the best reviews.

[Colt 555]

There is always a chance for improvement when somepony shares its mind, hope you can make an opinion of my OC's

 

OC's -

 

Colt Strahl |

 

 

Earth Miracle |

 

 

 

Here you have access to all their artwork

Edited July 30, 2013 by Colt

[♞RedLotus♞ 360]

I have 5 OC's in my signature, go for it! It might take awhile, but it should keep you quite a bit...very, busy. Hope you can find something good in them.

I am quite sorry but due to a lot of work and a bit more people requesting, I am going to have to work on only one OC, but feel free to request more reviews later on! 

 

I am going to do fender, So lets begin!

 

Fender~

 

Looks: I think he looks pretty nice! Its an odd combination of colors, but it somehow looks good! His mane is rather long, and looks original to me. Sometimes people like to add a different colored version of rainbowdash's hair to male ponies, and it looks wrong, so you did a good job on making him look nice. 

 

Cutiemark: That story sounds very sweet, and calming. so far he sounds like a nice guy. His cutiemark also looks pretty good. I'm not sure if i'm right, but his talent is singing I'm guessing. That isn't something you see most Pegasai do, so its pretty surprising. 

 

Personality: Okay he sounds like a nice person. It almost seems as if he has double personalities, or maybe an alter ego. You mention that he does some things in some ways, but might also do them in a different way. This makes him interesting, so you might want to add more to that. Also, try giving him some flaws, or bad habits to make his personality a bit more spiced up. 

 

Backstory: It sounds quite creative. The fact that his parents died does sound interesting, not something you hear way too often. You might want to add a few more details to make there story more epic.

 

Rating: A, try adding a bit more details and you will definitely get an S. Great character too, and pretty original. 

[~Sole~ 852]

Mind trying to rate my oc? His name is sole, his character page is in my link by the way. Please judge honestly.

[Fender 1,283]

 

 

I am going to have to work on only one OC, but feel free to request more reviews later on! 

 

 

If it's alright with you, I'd like my current request for all of them to stand. Y'know, but just review each one over time whenever you feel it is appropriate? Only if you say that's okay though. :3

 

As for the review...A grade! Yay! I'll look into the stuff you said. c:

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,824]

Could you rate my second latest OC Melody Breeze. Here's a link to her profile pic. Hopefully the backstory doesn't sound cheesy or anything. 

 

http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/melody-breeze-r3875

[♞RedLotus♞ 360]

Yeah, why not, I always enjoy what others think of my OC.

 

My OC is in the link under my signature.

 

As a note, his backstory behind his cutie mark is yet to be explained.

 

Enjoy.

 

Okay so lets do this

 

Swift star~

 

Looks: He looks nice, the color scheme is alright. Try changing his mane a bit, it looks good but that style is very common, try using the pony creator game as a blueprint only, because there might be some OC's that will look awfully similar to him. I suggest you work with something that looks like that, but give it its own originality.

 

Cutiemark: Well... a letter X? I think you can maybe give him something more symbolic than just an X. I mean, an X can mean anything! Also, I'm not really sure what his talent is. Sure... he might be smart, and successful but I think you should really consider a real talent. Just because he accomplishes goals in life, doesnt mean its his talent. Try giving him something that can actually be considered a hobby, or talent. 

 

Personality: He seems like an overall good guy. Hes pretty mellow and cool, but try adding some more spice to that. make him have an original and interesting charisma. You cant really feel much of his spirit, other than him being smart and friendly. So try working on that.

 

Backstory: Make sure to wright one as soon as you can!

 

Rating: B, try making him more complex, maybe give him a real talent, and a better cutiemark. I still like him though, but in my opinion he is halfway there, he still needs a bit more progress until he becomes and real OC.

[~Silver Essence~ 2,625]

Okay so lets do this

 

Swift star~

 

Looks: He looks nice, the color scheme is alright. Try changing his mane a bit, it looks good but that style is very common, try using the pony creator game as a blueprint only, because there might be some OC's that will look awfully similar to him. I suggest you work with something that looks like that, but give it its own originality.

 

Cutiemark: Well... a letter X? I think you can maybe give him something more symbolic than just an X. I mean, an X can mean anything! Also, I'm not really sure what his talent is. Sure... he might be smart, and successful but I think you should really consider a real talent. Just because he accomplishes goals in life, doesnt mean its his talent. Try giving him something that can actually be considered a hobby, or talent. 

 

Personality: He seems like an overall good guy. Hes pretty mellow and cool, but try adding some more spice to that. make him have an original and interesting charisma. You cant really feel much of his spirit, other than him being smart and friendly. So try working on that.

 

Backstory: Make sure to wright one as soon as you can!

 

Rating: B, try making him more complex, maybe give him a real talent, and a better cutiemark. I still like him though, but in my opinion he is halfway there, he still needs a bit more progress until he becomes and real OC.

Thank you for your constructive criticism my friend.

 

Yes, I do plan to change most of his biography, he needs to be a bit more edgy I'll admit.

 

As for the X, I'm keeping it, there is a reason why it's an X, it's a dark history, but you'll see.

 

Thanks. Glad most give my OC a perfect A+ to a B. 

[Spiritual Nightmare 88]

@, 

 

Excuse me, mister, but could you rate my OC? It SHOULD be in my signature, and...

 

I mean, if you really want to, I'm not forcing you to.

 

So...you can do whichever you want, and...um...

 

have fun doing them OwO

[♞RedLotus♞ 360]

Thank you for your constructive criticism my friend.

 

Yes, I do plan to change most of his biography, he needs to be a bit more edgy I'll admit.

 

As for the X, I'm keeping it, there is a reason why it's an X, it's a dark history, but you'll see.

 

Thanks. Glad most give my OC a perfect A+ to a B. 

No problem mate, your doing really good so far with your OC. Keep it going, and try as best as you can to add more bits and peices until you get the perfect OC.

 

I would like you to rate the second OC in my signature, whose name is Darling.

So far, she has been getting the best reviews.

 

Okay lets see here...

 

Darling~

 

Looks: She looks good! I really like the color of her coat, it kind of reminds me of my OC ocelot. Her mane looks nice, and the colors contrast very well, she is a beautiful mare indeed. The only problem I see here is that she has no tail! i mean, I don't know if its part of the storyline or not, I do this bit by bit as I read along so i might find out soon! She would really look better with a tail, so anyways lets move along.

 

Cutiemark: I like her cutie mark, it looks nice BUT! Here's my problem! Its sweet and all how it represents her lovable qualities, and all that good stuff, but THAT is not a TALENT. A lot of people make this mistake! they give ponies cutiemarks that represent their personality, but not their talent. This symbol is supposed to represent what she does for a throughout her life, what makes her who she is. Try giving her an actual talent, maybe she can be talented with kids? Or she can be skilled at helping ponies with relationships? The choice is yours.

 

Personality: She seems pretty nice. Her lustful personality sounds quite interesting! I would like to hear more about her sexual nature and how she resolves her problems. 

 

Backstory: It sounds very sad, but unique! I like it quite a lot! Now I understand the whole tail thing which sounds like a very original and clever idea. I find no flaws in her backstory.

 

Rating: You get an A! good job! A bit more work around the who cutiemark subject, and you will definitely get a perfect S score. 

[Grand_Finale 529]

Ugh, mind if you do grand Finale for me? her link is in my signature. It seems my comment had been taken down, which sucks. I shall wait patiently until its my turn though

[♞RedLotus♞ 360]

Dont worry folks! I will get to your OC's tomorrow as soon as I can, but right now I need to get some shut eye, I have a big day tomorrow. I am looking foward to reveiwing your OC's!

[Nomadic 210]

When you get the time I would enjoy it if you rated mine. The link for his profile is down below in my signature. Thanks again, I look forward to your response.

[Flying wub 48]

This is my oc flying wub in sitting pose frome there comes my name   only so you know this oc is very shy but at a party he´s wild. ps. this is Vinyl scratches son frome the future.

[LittleRawr 679]

I'd love it if you do a review of my OC, Cleo.

 

Someone gave me a review before, and said that she had too many bad qualities, when it's usually the opposite xD.

 

Anyways, have fun reviewing! :3

[Rascal~ 657]

I would definitely love it if you would review my OC, it'll be the first time that someone will properly review her, wonder what qualities you will like.

http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/stardust-r4020

[Mephala 2,633]

Ah, what the hell. My OC's usually fail at this sort of thing (I tend to rack on the doom n' gloom due to the nature of the fanfic world they're created in).

I'd love if you could do Braith. She is in my OC list under the Decarth area. I'll likely request more later. :-p

Edited July 30, 2013 by PinkieDaShy

[Moonlight 7,286]

Well, if you could...can you review my OC, please? 

 

http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/puzzle-piece-r3213

 

Some constructive criticism would be great to receive. I just hope my character isn't a Mary Sue or something. I do plan on rewriting the back story, but still...give me you opinion, if you please?

[♞RedLotus♞ 360]

 

There is always a chance for improvement when somepony shares its mind, hope you can make an opinion of my OC's

 

OC's -

 

Colt Strahl |

 

 

Earth Miracle |

 

 

 

 

Here you have access to all their artwork

 

Okay, I am back and ready to do these reviews so lets get started! I will review Emi for you, since I did colt for you a while back.

 

Earth Miracle~

 

Looks: She looks pretty original, I'll tell you that. Her mane is nice, the color scheme is alright, shes a nice looking mare. She kind of reminds me of rarity, she sure does look as pretty as her! Good job on the overall design. 

 

Cutiemark: The cutie mark LOOKS good, and it sort of makes sense for what her talent is, I suppose. If I'm not mistaken, her talent is creating music right? Well thats nice! I dont seem to find any flaws there.

 

Personality: You did a good job on matching her personality with her looks and talents. She sounds like an overall sweetheart, a lady with passion and emotion. It seems that she is a very spiritual and emotional pony, that cares alot about passionate things. I cant say I found that many flaws, or any at all. 

 

Backstory: The story is pretty neat, sounds sad at the same time. Its pretty emotional if you ask me. I didnt find any flaws, but it would be nice if you added more spice to it. 

 

Rating: A, congratulations. You get an A because you managed to balance out all her characteristics into one pony, and made her work out pretty good. Try adding just a bit more spice to the story, and you will get an extremely vivid novelty!

[Colt 555]

 

 

Rating: A, congratulations. You get an A because you managed to balance out all her characteristics into one pony, and made her work out pretty good. Try adding just a bit more spice to the story, and you will get an extremely vivid novelty!

 

Hey there thanks a lot for the review, I have to say I feel a little bad since I didn't realized  you were Ocelot, sorry sorry.  

I keep getting this feedback of her story being sad and her lack of "weakness", I worked on it but its more than obvious that it needs more work.

 

Once again thanks for your time and words =D

[. eris . 1,661]

This looks like fun! Could you take a quick peek at my OC Cliff Chaser? Here's the link: http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/cliff-chaser-r2970

 

Excited to see what you think! I hope his backstory's okay...

[--Thunder Bolt-- 534]

Thank you for doing this.  Could you please rate my new OC Nephthys Nightshade when you get the chance?