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[♞RedLotus♞ 360]

Mind trying to rate my oc? His name is sole, his character page is in my link by the way. Please judge honestly.

Sure thing, lets get down to business.

 

Sole~

 

Looks: Okay! so this OC happens to be a gryphon, rather than a pony. I am not sure what to think of non pony OC's, but hey I think gryphons are pretty sweet. He looks like any other gryphon would look, but I guess they all do have some different qualities. Since i can't really judge anything here, I will just say that I like him because I do like gryphons! 

 

Personality: He seems like a hard on the outside, but soft in the inside kind of guy. I really like how hes overconfident, cool, and tough but he also really cares about his friends and is willing to fight for them. I'm glad that hes not a 100 percent jerk. 

 

Backstory: I know that alot of people wont like this characters backstory , but I absolutely love it! I am personally a big fan of action, so the whole war thing sounds pretty cool. Some people dont like having violence involved, so they might tell you something else, but thats just my opinion. Im not a big fan of the whole son of discord thing, I dont like it when people say that they are related to characters who actually exist. Other than that, it sounds alright!

 

Rating: B, you did pretty good, just try to make things work out a bit more. I suggest you ease on the cussing, and the big hardcore language. You should maybe cool things down a bit, maybe make him just a bit more appealing, but if you are going for more of a villain type of character, then go for it.

[~Sole~ 852]

Sure thing, lets get down to business.

 

Sole~

 

Looks: Okay! so this OC happens to be a gryphon, rather than a pony. I am not sure what to think of non pony OC's, but hey I think gryphons are pretty sweet. He looks like any other gryphon would look, but I guess they all do have some different qualities. Since i can't really judge anything here, I will just say that I like him because I do like gryphons! 

 

Personality: He seems like a hard on the outside, but soft in the inside kind of guy. I really like how hes overconfident, cool, and tough but he also really cares about his friends and is willing to fight for them. I'm glad that hes not a 100 percent jerk. 

 

Backstory: I know that alot of people wont like this characters backstory , but I absolutely love it! I am personally a big fan of action, so the whole war thing sounds pretty cool. Some people dont like having violence involved, so they might tell you something else, but thats just my opinion. Im not a big fan of the whole son of discord thing, I dont like it when people say that they are related to characters who actually exist. Other than that, it sounds alright!

 

Rating: B, you did pretty good, just try to make things work out a bit more. I suggest you ease on the cussing, and the big hardcore language. You should maybe cool things down a bit, maybe make him just a bit more appealing, but if you are going for more of a villain type of character, then go for it.

thaks for the review! I was gonna make his fur black, but I kinda had to change that. And he's meant to be a hero, its just he used to be evil. Oh, and what do you mean about cussing and language? I'm almost positive I didn't put any cuss words in...

[The Blades Shadow 444]

Could you rate my OC?
Here's his profile, thing (I don't know what to call it): http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/blazing-hoof-r4037

*Prepares for some sort of bad rating*

[Misty Rose 3,216]

I was gonna post yesterday but got interrupted by my wi-fi being evil.

 

Anyway I would love it if you could review Pink Mist. I made a couple tweaks based on other suggestions and I want to see how I did. Link is below my sig. Thanks!

[♞RedLotus♞ 360]

 

@, 

 

Excuse me, mister, but could you rate my OC? It SHOULD be in my signature, and...

 

I mean, if you really want to, I'm not forcing you to.

 

So...you can do whichever you want, and...um...

 

have fun doing them OwO

 

Okay then, I will review your OC cloud chaser!

 

Cloud chaser~

 

Looks: Okay, his head is rather soft looking than what most stallions look like, I think the type oh head you gave him is the one thats for the mares so that looks rather odd. He should really use a bit more color, I'm not digging the black and white. Try going for something that stands out a bit more, the black paint on the tip of his mouth also looks wrong. Work on it a bit more, try giving him some more style. .

 

Cutiemark: The cutie mark is fine, if i'm not mistaken, his talent would be making art out of clouds? 

 

Personality: I like how you involved the elements of harmony into this. I think its very interesting, but if you make your character have so many good qualities and nothing bad at all, it will make him very bland! There is nothing we can learn about him if hes perfect. Try giving him some bad qualities aswell, that might show up when hes not in a good mood, or if you get on his bad side.

 

Backstory: Interesting story, but you should really add more details into that. Why did he fly away from his family anyways? Did he enjoy being with them? So many questions to ask. I advise you work on that.

 

Rating: C, you get this grade because you were able to come up with a decent storyline and some neat information regarding this character, but you lack elaborate details that need to be put into the backstory, you also need to give him some bad qualities that people can relate too. work on that, and soon enough you will have yourself an A, maybe even an S!

[Spiritual Nightmare 88]

Okay then, I will review your OC cloud chaser!

 

Cloud chaser~

 

Looks: Okay, his head is rather soft looking than what most stallions look like, I think the type oh head you gave him is the one thats for the mares so that looks rather odd. He should really use a bit more color, I'm not digging the black and white. Try going for something that stands out a bit more, the black paint on the tip of his mouth also looks wrong. Work on it a bit more, try giving him some more style. .

 

Cutiemark: The cutie mark is fine, if i'm not mistaken, his talent would be making art out of clouds? 

 

Personality: I like how you involved the elements of harmony into this. I think its very interesting, but if you make your character have so many good qualities and nothing bad at all, it will make him very bland! There is nothing we can learn about him if hes perfect. Try giving him some bad qualities aswell, that might show up when hes not in a good mood, or if you get on his bad side.

 

Backstory: Interesting story, but you should really add more details into that. Why did he fly away from his family anyways? Did he enjoy being with them? So many questions to ask. I advise you work on that.

 

Rating: C, you get this grade because you were able to come up with a decent storyline and some neat information regarding this character, but you lack elaborate details that need to be put into the backstory, you also need to give him some bad qualities that people can relate too. work on that, and soon enough you will have yourself an A, maybe even an S!

 

Thanks a lot OwO

 

Also, erm...

It's Lightning Chaser.

Just a heads up, sorry.

 

But anyways, thanks for the awesome criticism, and I hope you have a good time rating the rest! OwO

[aoEAF2FBvC0MIo2Q 3,673]

Here goes. SunBurn.

 

 

So the drawing itself isn't top-notch but for a request, I was pretty grateful. I made a drawing myself, possibly better depicting the form

 

 

Donkeys don't get cutie marks.

 

Personality... He tends to like the desert environment. When he has time for himself without anything to worry about, he likes to wander around and get to know the place better, taking breaks along the way. If he has any tasks on his mind, he'd be inclined to talk about them, which kinda hinders him on social occasions. He does have a good work ethic and tends to be precise in his tasks as he has enough experience to know not to exhaust himself too quickly. Although maybe a little too slow for some ponies' liking since he doesn't like to rush things. As for the kind of work he does, he's really a jack of all trades and can do many kinds of work well enough as far as most are concerned. From carpentry to sailing, chances are if you need an extra set of hooves, he'll be a nice addition to the team. Being a traveler, he's skilled enough 

One of the things he likes to do is help out the inexperienced and help them to get better, doing so with confidence but without much arrogance since he knows he's done some pretty stupid things before he started to get things right. Whenever he comes across somepony who seems helpless, he'll be inclined to help, as though it kicks his parenting caregiver instincts into action. 

In a stressful situation, he starts to put a lot of focus on planning and becomes very alert for any hint of information. This is where his experiences really serves him well as he's most decisive the more familiar the stressing situation is. If it's an unfamiliar situation where his experience becomes useless, he'll very likely get pessimistic and reckless. He tends to trot around in a sandy-colored cloak since Equestria isn't as warm as he's used to. He goes around hooded only at night.

 

Backstory... I'm still not too sure about this but here goes. Hm, he's from outside Equestria and got shipwrecked. He and the rest of the crew set sail to look for better alternatives to settle as territorial disputes with rival factions escalate despite having settled in parched rocky land where farming's impossible through conventional means but the island's too small for the badlands to act as a sufficient barrier. If he doesn't return home within two years, he and the crew he was a part of will be presumed dead. His first priority is to find any other survivors. In the meantime, as he travels through Equestria's coastal towns, he pays close attention to the kind of society he's dealing with, often using his acute donkey hearing to eavesdrop on unwary ponies to gather information on politics and public health. The latter is what'll make him decide if he would bring good or bad news should he return home.

Edited July 31, 2013 by SunBurn

[Nothing&NoOne 695]

Could you rate Ebony, please? I posted her in another rating thread but I don't think I ever got a response.

 

http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/princess-ebony-nightingale-r680

 

Touched everything up so it isn't as painful grammatically to read.

[Blue Moon 6,341]

Could you review my OC, Blue Moon? I'll leave a link below. Be as harsh as you want, and thanks in advance.

 

Here is the wonderful link:

http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/blue-moon-r2808

[♞RedLotus♞ 360]

Ugh, mind if you do grand Finale for me? her link is in my signature. It seems my comment had been taken down, which sucks. I shall wait patiently until its my turn though

Alright, lets go right ahead!

 

Grand finale~

 

Looks: She looks pretty good! I like her classy style, and I love the gold, blonde ish kind of color mixed with the red, very fancy. Shes looks decent, try tweaking her mane and tail a bit to make her looks more original, because I gotta say that pony creator isnt always such a good way to come up with your OC. Its a good start, but you shouldnt leave her permanantly like that. 

 

Cutiemark: Her cutie mark looks nice, and it fits her very well. She must be a talented stage performer.

 

Personality: I really like how she is dramatic, I can really feel your characters spirit by the way you describe her. I suggest you add a tad bit of spice and sass into her, that will make her a really funny and vivid character. I was also surprised by that little detail that you mentioned, how her magic gets out of hand when shes trying to be dramatic. 

 

Backstory: Interesting story, I like it. Try adding just a bit more detail into it. A longer story would also be nicer, and try to describe her life more with some qualities that reflect off her attitude. As for everything else, you are doing good! 

 

Rating: You get a B, a very decent grade because you managed to make her vivid and relateable at the same time. Your attention to original details makes the story much more interesting. Good job!

Hey guys sorry for the long wait! I promise to get to you guys asap. I might not go in the proper order because some OC's are much more longer and harder to rate. So please be patient. 

[Outkin 35]

Hello, this is a work in progress, It's still unpolished so I'll take all the criticism you can throw at me...if your willing to do it of course. I understand if you don' want to rate an unfinished oc. It'll all be in the spoiler below if and when your ready =)

 

 

Aurora Dawn 

 

This is just from ye olde pony generator, it was a fast way to test color scheme and better then my physical art. My own work will have a better manestyle and look a bit more masculine (I see certain things as feminine on this.) I'm posting this pic mostly for the colour scheme, I'm afraid the physical rating will have to take a hit until he gets an upgrade >_<

 

Cuitemark will be something along the lines of a hypnosis watch. He uses illusion magic, which he uses to make ponies think or act a certain way, similar to hypnosis. (One note on this, he can never do this directly, he has to externally uses illusions to trick people)   

 

His unicorn powers manifested as a young colt, turning invisible, then occasionally becoming visible again briefly. Hilarity insured as his parents were convinced they had lost their son when in reality he was literally under their noses. As he matured, so did his magic, he  found he could do all forms of illusions! He could conjure stationary (and later moving) images, manipulate the light to cause optical illusions, manipulate his voice to sound like other ponies, or other creatures entirely! However he quickly began using it to play pranks. They were always harmless (as he never wanted to cause harm to anyone, even in spite). and at first everyone took it in good fun..but over time everyone became sick of his hi-jinks, his childish nature, and not ever taking anything seriously. No one had time for being aurora's newest source of entertainment, especially as they got older and found their niche and place in the world. He continued on anyways but felt....empty. Something was missing...he needed something to strive for! He put pranking aside and....(cutting off here as this is where I want to start playing around with him. However it'll flow into him standing up for someone when he sees them coming to harm (as I said earlier he can't stand to see this), feeling satisfaction for helping people and having an actual friend for a change, and learning to use his magic for good. He'll then entertain people with his magic (with the occasional prank) and push himself to find the best way to make people happy)

 

Edited August 6, 2013 by Outkin