A Much, Much Better Ending to "Sweet Apple Massacre"

[Ra1nbowCrasH 264]

Big Macintosh surveyed the many apples trees that made up Sweet Apple Acres. It was nearly apple-buck season once again, and it looked as though they would be having a bumper harvest this year. He nodded, satisfied. His sister Applejack walked up beside him.

 

“Whoo, boy howdy! I sure am glad you ain’t injured this time, Big Macintosh!” she said. “Why, there’s even more apples on them trees than last year!”

 

“Eeyup!” Big Macintosh replied, in his characteristic manner. “Them’s a lotta apples.”

 

Applejack was silent for a moment, enjoying the feel of the slight breeze against her blonde mane. “Say, I don’t suppose you’ve seen Apple Bloom anywhere, have ya? I been looking for her all day, and she ain’t nowhere to be found.”

 

Big Macintosh shook his head. “Sorry sis, can’t say I have.”

 

“Darn! That silly filly’s probably gone off somewhere with her friends. I just hope she ain’t getting herself into any mischief, or else there’ll be hay to pay!”

 

“Don’t you go worryin’ yourself, Applejack,” he replied, “I’m sure she’s perfectly fine. But anyway, I need to go back to the barn. I gotta go and press some apples for some of my home-brewed apple cider. I hoof-picked a few apples earlier specially, all nice and plump and ripe, and they ain’t gonna press themselves.”

 

Applejack laughed. “You sure do love your cider, don’t ya! Just make sure Apple Bloom don’t get her hooves on it again, we all know what happened last time!”

 

Big Macintosh chuckled along with his sister. “Eeyup!”

 

The large red pony trotted back to the barn, and gently closed the door. He opened a trap-door with his mouth and went down the steps into an old disused apple cellar. Usually it was just filled with junk; scrap metal, old worn out ploughs, old rope and various other bits and bobs that had outlived their usefulness. Big Macintosh often came down here when he wanted to get away from the world, to withdraw for a little while for some peace and quiet.

 

-----Alternate Ending Starts-----

After a few minutes, Applejack decided to go and help Big Macintosh with the cider, if she was lucky she might run into Apple Bloom too. She walked into the barn, but didn't see Big Macintosh anywhere.

 

------Resume Original------

Today was different, however. The old rope, at least, had found a new use, because in cellar space were Apple Bloom and her fellow Cutie Mark Crusaders Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo, bound and gagged, propped up against the wall. Three pairs of scared, round eyes looked up at Big Macintosh as he approached.

 

“Now then, ya three fillies,” he said, as placid as ever. “Y’all need to learn a lesson. You need to learn not to mess around with Big Macintosh. All I want is some peace and quiet,” he said, looking directly at Apple Bloom. The little red haired filly cowered under his gaze. “All I want is a quiet life, without all you Cutie Mark Crusaders runnin’ round the place, making with the noise. When I’m finished with y’all, there gonna be no noise from you ever again.”

 

As Big Macintosh approached, Scootaloo flapped her wings, struggling to get off the ground. Big Macintosh laughed, and grabbed one of her wings. He twisted, at first slow, watching the pain visibly grow in her eyes, but then tore hard, smiling slightly when he heard the snap and the muffled whimper that came from Scootaloo. He then threw her to the ground.

 

“Your wings are useless, ya silly filly,” he said pleasantly. He then went to a toolbox and took out a rusty knife with a jagged blade and dropped it in front of the three fillies. “I’m gonna take off those gags now,” he said. “The first one of you to scream gets their tongues cut out.”

 

He took off Sweetie Belle’s gag first. She looked up at him with terror, but managed to stay quiet. Next was Scootaloo. She let out a strangled whine and was breathing heavily, still in horrendous pain from her broken wing, but managed to resist the temptation. Finally, he removed the gag from his sister Apple Bloom. She stared at him with her large round eyes, filled with fear and incomprehension. This was Big Macintosh after all, her big brother and the gentlest of souls. Wasn’t he? Surely this was just a horrible joke? But she had seen what he had done to Scootaloo’s wing, and it was definitely no joke. She took a deep breath.

 

“APPLEJA—“

 

 

------- Alternate Ending Continues Here-------

Just as she was about to look for Big Macintosh somewhere else, Applejack heard a piercing scream coming from the old apple cellar.

 

"What the hay was that?" Applejack said to herself as she opened the trap door leading to the apple cellar.

 

What Applejack saw sent shivers down her spine, but she still managed to say in a stern manner, "Big Macintosh! What the hay are you doin'?!?"

 

Big Macintosh quickly turned around, his knife no longer facing Apple Bloom. Seeing that he was armed, Applejack knocked him out cold with a swift-kick to the head. She then led the three Cutie Mark Crusaders out of the barn, locking the door behind them.

 

"Anypony hurt?" she asked.

 

"Macintosh broke Scootaloo's w-" Sweetie Bell started, but before she could finish Applejack lifted them onto her back and started galloping towards Ponyville.

 

Applejack left Sweetie Bell and Apple Bloom with Twilight Sparkle, who proceeded to contact Rarity and Princess Celestia.

 

Applejack then took Scootaloo to Nurse Redheart. Fortunately, the wing would head in a few weeks.

 

Within 15 minutes, members of Celestia's Royal Guard were outside the barn, ready to capture Big Macintosh. They quickly opened the barn door and then opened the trap door leading to the apple cellar, where they found Big Macintosh still unconscious.

 

Epilogue:

 

Big Macintosh was found guilty of attempted murder and armed assault, he was sentenced to 75 years in the dungeon with no chance for parole. Scootaloo's wing healed completely, and although nopony else was physically injured, they all suffer from occasional nightmares.

 

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This is the second part of my "A Much, Much Better Ending" series, the first being "A Much, Much Better Ending to 'Cupcakes'". Please tell me what you think and let me know if there are any other gruesome fan fictions you would like to see redone to have a happier ending.

Edited April 1, 2012 by Nyx

[MVC NVMXD JVRXD 2386]

I'm finished reading fanfics because they always make me sad, or disgust me. But this.... This I like.

[Chigens and Kay 3800]

I liked the original better.

[The Awesome One 1295]

I read both SAM and Cupcakes just an hour ago....Not scary just plain ridiculous.

[Ra1nbowCrasH 264]

I just want to know if I should keep making alternate endings to the more messed-up fanfics.

[Frost 18]

Cupcakes = SAW

 

Alternate endings are always the best

[Aureity 3042]

Sweet Apple Massacre's ending was still a better ending than Mass Effect 3.

[Twinight125 44]

Sweet Apple Massacre's ending was still a better ending than Mass Effect 3.

 

nice one... haha just kidding

[Page Turner 605]

I'm finished reading fanfics because they always make me sad, or disgust me. But this.... This I like.

 

That's probably because you only read the wrong ones, Not all fanfics are cupcakes, in fact most are not. if you Don't like Grimdark, the answer is 'Don't Read Grimdark' not 'Don't read Fanfiction'. by choosing the latter, one deprives themselves of all the good fanfiction out there.

 

 

now as for the Alt ending here...

[HeartRarity! 1]

I've got a challenge for you: write an alt. ending to this http://www.fimfiction.net/story/32332/A-Fun-Day%21 , it's my favorite grimdark fic. should be challenging lol!

[Ra1nbowCrasH 264]

I've got a challenge for you: write an alt. ending to this http://www.fimfictio...2332/A-Fun-Day! , it's my favorite grimdark fic. should be challenging lol!

 

Challenge accepted.

[letterone 1198]

Sweet Apple Massacre...

 

I listened to Mic the Microphone read it. Needless to say, it was uber-disturbing, and that's probably because of Mic's awesome ability to do great voices. Is it actually as bad when ya read it yourself?

[Ra1nbowCrasH 264]

Sweet Apple Massacre...

 

I listened to Mic the Microphone read it. Needless to say, it was uber-disturbing, and that's probably because of Mic's awesome ability to do great voices. Is it actually as bad when ya read it yourself?

 

Not sure. I got to the part where Scootaloo iis raped, and I stopped reading right there.

[Rainbow Gale 0]

Thank you for writing this. Trying so hard to replace my memory of the other ending with this one now, so I can feel better.

[Scootadress 356]

Somepony needs to create a fanfic that is a combination of Rainbow Factory and Cupcakes. You seriously need to. (Its so obvious why! Think about it:What if Pinkie Pie lied to Dash that she really had a number system because in all actuality, she learned of what she had done to little fillies and colts that failed? More specifically, to one that idolized her?

What if, in reality, Pinkie Pie was actually killing off all of the ponies involved in the Rainbow Factory but hid it from RD? She pretty much tortured RD. She wouldn't do that without a reason. 

Remember, this after the episode with the sonic rainboom. *That reminds me:Didn't she taste the rainbow?*)

 

I love your works.

[Darker 1340]

Still like the original better.