searching [OOC] Ambition for Ascension

[Loud Opinion 602]

@ExplosionMare,

Hmmm... I thought that you would make a reaction post seeing as I was last, but I can see if you didn't have much to comment on. If you let me know in the future then I can get my posts out faster. That being said, I think I'll just have a maximum wait time of two days (unless the people I'm waiting on let me know they can't post for a while).

@ExplosionMare,

Also thanks for pointing out the title. I thought I was missing something.

[ExplosionMare 18,065]

12 hours ago, Loud Opinion said:

@ExplosionMare,

Hmmm... I thought that you would make a reaction post seeing as I was last, but I can see if you didn't have much to comment on. If you let me know in the future then I can get my posts out faster. That being said, I think I'll just have a maximum wait time of two days (unless the people I'm waiting on let me know they can't post for a while).

@ExplosionMare,

Also thanks for pointing out the title. I thought I was missing something.

Thanks for changing the title!

(BTW I just posted. I might have a few delays every now and then cause this RP likes to get buried in my notifications)

[Loud Opinion 602]

Will be gone for a week. So I won't be able to update until after that just as a heads up.

Here's hoping the people I'm waiting on get to post when I get back.

Also @ExplosionMare, it appears to be your turn again.

Also Also, @Derpy Pon-3, are you planing on sleeping through the first big event?

[ExplosionMare 18,065]

@Loud Opinion

I’ll try and post tomorrow. I’ll have to think of something for Starlight to say. I did post in A New Kingdom, though. I was kinda tired when I wrote it but hopefully it’s enough for you to go off of.

[Loud Opinion 602]

Hey all, I'm back from the worst week of the year and my subsequent recovery from that worst week. I still feel like I've got swiss cheese for a body but I'm excited to getting back to what I want to do.

@ReverieRiver

You want me to give you a chance to respond to ExplosionMare or would you rather I get the main story moving again.

[ReverieRiver 526]

@Loud Opinion

Sorry for the holdup! Been caught up in real life things, finding a job specifcally.... blegh

I'm gonna go ahead and put out a reply real quick, and then we can advance the story!

[Loud Opinion 602]

Well, I didn't want to knock a player out this soon, but the show must go on. I hope I can get a few more players on board though. So, my posts are going to lag a bit to see if we can get more players.

[Loud Opinion 602]

The magic system is revealed. Check the bottom of the OP to see where you're character landed.

[ExplosionMare 18,065]

@Loud Opinion

Is Octavia talking to Starlight in the post you just made or is she talking to whoever is at the door? (The thing she half-yells)

Edited December 23, 2020 by ExplosionMare
Clarification

[Loud Opinion 602]

Octavia is talking to Starlight. The three of you should now be inside the temple btw.

[ExplosionMare 18,065]

Just now, Loud Opinion said:

Octavia is talking to Starlight. The three of you should now be inside the temple btw.

Ok 👍🏻 

[Loud Opinion 602]

Also, the thing that was at the door has wandered off by now. Even if it stuck around it wouldn't be the talkative type.

[Loud Opinion 602]

Took a break for the holidays, but I'm back and I'm experimenting with the format again.

Let me know how you feel about me upping my font size.

Edited December 28, 2020 by Loud Opinion

[Loud Opinion 602]

@Califorum,

A great application with some good presentation and I am a big fan of the concept. I would recommend you pay a little more attention to grammar and spelling (I use Grammarly to do all the hard work for me.) within the RP.

The character itself seems a bit strong relative to the rest other characters. Its nothing we can't fix with some workshopping. I'll DM you so we can hash out the details.

[Loud Opinion 602]

Alright @ExplosionMare, @ReverieRiver, and @Derpy Pon-3. How do we feel about Magnolia here?

I'm on board, but I'll run it by everyone else seance this is untimely a collaborative effort.

@Califorum

Most of the people here haven't been active for some time so I'm only waiting for @ExplosionMare. If anyone else wants to chime in and start being active again I'll hear them out, but I won't wait for them.

[ReverieRiver 526]

@Loud Opinion,

Hm, the more the merrier, I say!

Also I do apologize for dropping off the face of the earth 'round here. Sometimes I just get absorbed in real life matters such as work or other interests, but I'm here again, hopefully to stay

So do I uh... just make Silver wake up whenever I feel like hopping back in?

[Loud Opinion 602]

@ReverieRiver,

Ah, it's good to see you back. Don't worry, our hosts will be there soon with the necessary equipment to get Mss Tongue back on her hooves.

[Loud Opinion 602]

@Califorum,

I'd like to wait for Explosionmare. Hes arguably the most invested in the story, having been here seance the beginning and sticking with it so constantly. so I'd like to get his input.

[ExplosionMare 18,065]

@Loud Opinion

I’ll go ahead and post once I find the notification. Also, as for your font, it’s a bit hard to look at. I think it would look a bit better if it was brought down a couple of sizes.

Edit: Now that I’ve seen it in the RP the font is okay.

@Califorum

Your OC sounds good! Looking forward to it!

Edited December 28, 2020 by ExplosionMare

[Loud Opinion 602]

@Califorum

Alright. The doors are open. Feel free to post at your leisure.

[Loud Opinion 602]

@Califorum

I'm torn between heart and forge, but it could also turn out to be edge.

I'd say Magnolia's aspect hasn't awakened yet.

After I see some RP interactions I can narrow it down.

[Loud Opinion 602]

@Califorum

Actually, I do have some immediate thoughts. I adore the wordplay in your first post but I see grammar errors that are seriously holding it back. Again, I would strongly suggest the use of a tool like Grammarly. As it stands I have trouble understanding exactly what is going on. Approaching the Temple is a simple enough concept to understand, but when you start interacting with multiple characters, grammar mistakes can make things very confusing.

Other than that, it was a beautiful introduction. Makes me feel bad for poking holes in it.

Side note: Sorry, in my summary I forgot to mention that the temple is on a clear hill just at the forest's edge. Don't worry about the first post just keep it in mind for latter.

[Loud Opinion 602]

Okay, so I read the post again. I was mistaken about the errors. Sorry about that. I actually ran it though Grammarly and didn't pick up any red lines, so again, sorry.

It didn't like the clarity, but no errors. That's just my tired eye making mistakes.

I saw some missing tenses

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The darkness dripping and oozing with viscosity as it surged forth from shadow to shadow.

Should be "The darkness was dripping and oozing with viscosity..." or "The darkness dripped and oozed with viscosity..." Probably not going to lead to any misunderstanding.

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...to rise up and take a three dimensional of that of a pony.

Three dimensional what? A shape. Again I don't think anyone will misunderstand.

Small nitpicks on my part, but it did take me out of it for a second. You never really lost me though.

[Loud Opinion 602]

Exactly. I don't expect perfection. I think your style more than makes up for it. I don't know anyone that proofreads for fun.

On my first reading I actually misread a lot of words (I read "from then forth" as "from the forth"). On my second reading I kept finding myself saying "that's not an error".

 

Anyway, I'll get my reply up soon.

[Loud Opinion 602]

@ExplosionMare

Made a slight error in assigning your aspect. It should be heart. Will fix.

Edited December 28, 2020 by Loud Opinion