I'll Review Your Stuff!

[Swick (ded) 436]

Hey everypony! Do you spend hours working on something, but nobody sees it or comments on it? That's what this thread is for! Just post a link to some kind of media you've made/are making, and I'll review it and edit the link into this post for others to view!

 

NOTE: Due to technical issues, I CANNOT view YouTube playlists. You need to give me the link to each individual video. Sorry.

 

Below are the links:

 

Drawings/Art

(11 links)

 

 

BronyCon Poster

Human Group Shot

Cute Mane 6

Fluttershy
Pinkie Pie, Rarity, Rainbow Dash

 

-Candy Blaze

 

 

 

The Dork Lord's OC

Bearded Dragon

Pony Skeleton Tutorial

 

 

-The Dork Lord

 

 

 

Videos

(1 link)

 

 

Magic Duel Dub - Vaddix

 

 

Music

(2 links)

 

 

Helping Twilight Win the Crown Double Piano Cover - Thunder-Dash

Bronydom DJ - x86cam

Helping Twilight Win the Crown Chiptune - AyoMistadurrk

 

 

 

Animation

(0 links)

 

 

 

 

 

 

Writing

(5 links)

 

 

The Mysterious Temple Treasure - Zygen

Batmare Begins - Batbrony

 

 

The 44 Sufferances of St. Ruros

Crown Thief

For Diners Only

 

 

- Hawk Moth

 

 

 

Games

(0 links)

 

 

 

 

 

 

Other

(0 links)

 

 

 

 

 

 

Edited September 24, 2013 by Swick

[Vaddix 85]

This describes my artist friend quite well. His DA name is djnightmar3. I believe he does exceptionally well, but it doesn't seem like anypony views his art. I've tried helping him out before, but it didn't seem to work. I'm going to try again though. 

 

http://djnightmar3.deviantart.com/art/PSG-MLP-FiM-Crossover-387685024

Also, my group has released a dub. It's been on Youtube for two days, and has over 250 views, but only two comments. I don't understand that ratio. If it's not too much trouble, could you link it? 

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xj3lt4xd9t8

[Swick (ded) 436]

This describes my artist friend quite well. His DA name is djnightmar3. I believe he does exceptionally well, but it doesn't seem like anypony views his art. I've tried helping him out before, but it didn't seem to work. I'm going to try again though. 

 

http://djnightmar3.deviantart.com/art/PSG-MLP-FiM-Crossover-387685024

Also, my group has released a dub. It's been on Youtube for two days, and has over 250 views, but only two comments. I don't understand that ratio. If it's not too much trouble, could you link it? 

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xj3lt4xd9t8

Art: It was really good, I'm not familiar with the crossover though, so I can't really give good criticism on that. Nothing I could find wrong with it.

 

Video: I personally didn't find it very funny. Adding curse words and dirty things into every other sentence doesn't make something funny, at least for me. Using them at the appropriate time can be funny, or even hilarious. Like "Yes, your royal pain in the ass."What I do like is the little things, like when it said "Hide and seek, go" and "Books mean more to me than even my friends", it made me laugh. Also, Snips's and Snails's audio was only in my right ear. Honestly, if I wasn't reviewing this, I would have stopped watching after the first ten seconds. Always use a really funny moment first, so you can keep your audience.

[GeekBrony 85]

Hello, I am a fellow DJ, but I feel I have gotten little to no support. I have DJ equipment and I love DJing, but sometimes I feel I am not getting attention at all. I only get about 1-3 listeners most of the time.

 

Here's an MP3 of my latest work (yeah I know 2 hours, but I think it is great). Please leave feedback.

 

http://www.x86cam.com/music/guaw/GetUpAndWub-TwoMixes-OneWeek.mp3

Link: http://www.x86cam.com/music/guaw/GetUpAndWub-TwoMixes-OneWeek.mp3

 

If it doesn't work, let me know.

Edited September 22, 2013 by x86cam

[Hawk Moth 390]

Do you only review pony-related things? I have some pony fics, but neither of them are finished, and I don't intend on working on them anymore. I do have several non-pony stories.

[Zygen 6,065]

Well, this Is actually a pretty interesting idea!

 

Maybe this is when I should go finish my mlp fanfic that is like really short and really dull honestly in general.

 

YOU SHaLL BE FORCED TO READ It!! .

 

Naw, but I may think about this when I have something I feel like posting.

 

I have actually wrote like 2 chapters of a fanfic, but it's pretty crappy. And I lost motivation for it anyways, partly due to lack of motivation from others but yeah.

 

Hard to get any support on a fanfic, with so many out there.

 

Anyways, right now im on my iPod anyways, but if I think about it I may post it or something else here.

[Blue Moon 6,336]

I guess you could review my artwork of Zygen's two OC's. The two OC's are being shipped together, and well; yeah.

 

Here is the picture. Thanks in advance!

 

[Candy Blaze 119]

I hope you don't mid looking at these drawings I made

 

BronyCon Poster

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/Human-Mane-Six-and-Spike-389884323

 

Human Group Shot

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Sketch-392337462

 

Cute Mane Six

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Sketch-392337462

 

Fluttershy

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Sketch-392337462

 

Pinkie Pie, Rarity, Rainbow Dash

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Sketch-392337462

 

I know it's a lot.... But I would appreciate your feedback

[Swick (ded) 436]

Hello, I am a fellow DJ, but I feel I have gotten little to no support. I have DJ equipment and I love DJing, but sometimes I feel I am not getting attention at all. I only get about 1-3 listeners most of the time.

 

Here's an MP3 of my latest work (yeah I know 2 hours, but I think it is great). Please leave feedback.

 

http://www.x86cam.com/music/guaw/GetUpAndWub-TwoMixes-OneWeek.mp3

Link: http://www.x86cam.com/music/guaw/GetUpAndWub-TwoMixes-OneWeek.mp3

 

If it doesn't work, let me know.

The page won't load for me. :/ Are there any other links?

 

Do you only review pony-related things? I have some pony fics, but neither of them are finished, and I don't intend on working on them anymore. I do have several non-pony stories.

Nope, I'll review pretty much anything! I'd be glad to read any of your stories.

 

Well, this Is actually a pretty interesting idea!

 

Maybe this is when I should go finish my mlp fanfic that is like really short and really dull honestly in general.

 

YOU SHaLL BE FORCED TO READ It!! .

 

Naw, but I may think about this when I have something I feel like posting.

 

I have actually wrote like 2 chapters of a fanfic, but it's pretty crappy. And I lost motivation for it anyways, partly due to lack of motivation from others but yeah.

 

Hard to get any support on a fanfic, with so many out there.

 

Anyways, right now im on my iPod anyways, but if I think about it I may post it or something else here.

Ooh, you should post it for all of the Internets to see.

 

I guess you could review my artwork of Zygen's two OC's. The two OC's are being shipped together, and well; yeah.

 

Here is the picture. Thanks in advance!

 

It's a really nice picture. I like the lines on the green OC, but the lines on the other pony are too thin. Also, their manes could use some work. They're kind of wobbly. Also, Zygen's ear is too small. I like the background, too. Nice work overall!

[Zygen 6,065]

The page won't load for me. :/ Are there any other links?

 

Nope, I'll review pretty much anything! I'd be glad to read any of your stories.

 

Ooh, you should post it for all of the Internets to see.

 

It's a really nice picture. I like the lines on the green OC, but the lines on the other pony are too thin. Also, their manes could use some work. They're kind of wobbly. Also, Zygen's ear is too small. I like the background, too. Nice work overall!

I'll probaly post it once I get on my computer at home later tommorow, I actually think it may be on the forums somewhere but yeah.

 

Regardless it kinda sucks, idk if I'm cut out for writing really. At one time I was gonna do like a whole life story for my ponysona, but considering I never finished that one fanfic and how little attention it got idk If I ever will really .

 

I'll see about posting the crappy little 2 chapter fanfic I made a while ago soon though.

[Swick (ded) 436]

I hope you don't mid looking at these drawings I made

 

BronyCon Poster

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/Human-Mane-Six-and-Spike-389884323

 

Human Group Shot

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Sketch-392337462

 

Cute Mane Six

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Sketch-392337462

 

Fluttershy

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Sketch-392337462

 

Pinkie Pie, Rarity, Rainbow Dash

http://candycorporation.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Sketch-392337462

 

I know it's a lot.... But I would appreciate your feedback

1. Wow, amazing! These are the best humanized ponies I've seen, great work! They look exactly like they would in real life. Three hundred brohooves to you, sir.

2. Pretty good, color would definitely help, though.

3-5. They're all the same link as #2. D:

[Doctor Derpy 164]

You seem to be honest in what you think, I like that, I like that a lot. Anyways, I've been meaning to ask this to a few people on how good I actually am at voice acting since I can't really trust 'family' or 'close-friends' since they would have biased opinions.

 

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1CoEPkU72qo

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=32GUqiNpRkc

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dZMbdm2C_XQ

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iDmOFh948U0

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iuD-EyoVGBw

Edited September 22, 2013 by Doctor Derpy

[GeekBrony 85]

The page won't load for me. :/ Are there any other links?

 

Nope, I'll review pretty much anything! I'd be glad to read any of your stories.

 

Ooh, you should post it for all of the Internets to see.

 

It's a really nice picture. I like the lines on the green OC, but the lines on the other pony are too thin. Also, their manes could use some work. They're kind of wobbly. Also, Zygen's ear is too small. I like the background, too. Nice work overall!

I'll post it to youtube and then reply to this thread again with the video. Thanks for telling me. Actually, it's an MP3 file directly from my site. Try downloading it/retrying.

[Candy Blaze 119]

1. Wow, amazing! These are the best humanized ponies I've seen, great work! They look exactly like they would in real life. Three hundred brohooves to you, sir.

2. Pretty good, color would definitely help, though.

3-5. They're all the same link as #2. D:

Thank you! I brought it to BronyCon to get it signed this summer and Michelle Creber's expression was priceless! It really means a lot for you to take time and look at my drawing.

 

With school going on, I don't know when I'm going to color it....

 

Cute Mane Six

http://www.deviantart.com/art/Cute-Human-Mane-Six-383291750

 

Fluttershy

http://www.deviantart.com/art/Fluttershy-385542211

 

Pinkie Pie, Rarity, Rainbow Dash

http://www.deviantart.com/art/Pinkie-Pie-Rarity-and-Rainbow-Dash-384608231

[Swick (ded) 436]

You seem to be honest in what you think, I like that, I like that a lot. Anyways, I've been meaning to ask this to a few people on how good I actually am at voice acting since I can't really trust 'family' or 'close-friends' since they would have biased opinions.

It's a playlist from #1 being the most recent and to #5 being the least recent

 

https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLCOmCyccqkL0GzIAubC8Rxq3Qldj1S9AX

Sorry, I should've mentioned this earlier. I can't view YouTube playlists. You have to give me the link to each individual video. Trust me, it's more aggravating to me than to you. :/

Thank you! I brought it to BronyCon to get it signed this summer and Michelle Creber's expression was priceless! It really means a lot for you to take time and look at my drawing.

 

With school going on, I don't know when I'm going to color it....

 

Cute Mane Six

http://www.deviantart.com/art/Cute-Human-Mane-Six-383291750

 

Fluttershy

http://www.deviantart.com/art/Fluttershy-385542211

 

Pinkie Pie, Rarity, Rainbow Dash

http://www.deviantart.com/art/Pinkie-Pie-Rarity-and-Rainbow-Dash-384608231

1. Stahp it. You're going to give me the d'aaawwws. Stahp. I can't find anything wrong with this one, either.

2. D'aaaaawwwwwww........ GODDANGIT CANDY BLAZE I TOLD YOU STAHP. But really, you're an extremely great artist.

3. Very nice. I really like how the poses fit their personalities perfectly. Since I need to give some kind of feedback other than how adorable these are, I guess Rainbow's wings could be thinner and/or more sharp.

 

The only thing I can think of is that you could add more detail to your drawings, like maybe some shading or something?

 

Have you drawn any ponies?

Edited September 22, 2013 by Swick

[sxp 404]

I wonder what do you think about my unconventional OC: (enter at your own risk)
http://fav.me/d6k3kp2

And this little sketch I made today: http://fav.me/d6na723

 

And perhaps this tutorial: http://fav.me/d6ldf4c

[Candy Blaze 119]

 

Sorry

I used photoshop for all of my digital art on my DeviantArt and I'm just a beginner in it. I'm starting to learn how to use Adobe Illustrator but like I said, I'm busy with school right now. I do draw ponies but I don't really post them on Deviantart. I draw ponies traditionally on paper but once winter vacation comes around I think I'll make more fan art with actual ponies in it. I'm working on a Soarin and RD comic right now but I'm having difficulties with that...

 

I'm going to try to do more shading on my digital art. Thanks

Edited September 22, 2013 by Candy Blaze

[Swick (ded) 436]

I wonder what do you think about my unconventional OC: (enter at your own risk)

http://fav.me/d6k3kp2

 

And this little sketch I made today: http://fav.me/d6na723

 

And perhaps this tutorial: http://fav.me/d6ldf4c

1. Okay, it looks like it wants to eat a couple babies for lunch or something. It's an excellent drawing, though. Very well done. Not much to critique. :3

2. Nice drawing, the neck looks a bit too sketchy, though.

3. DeviantArt doesn't like to let me click on things. Could you link the actual file?

[sxp 404]

 

 

3. DeviantArt doesn't like to let me click on things. Could you link the actual file?

There you go: http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2013/250/4/f/the_tutorial__part_two_by_tenebris789-d6ldf4c.jpg

Thanks for the feedback. I do certainly appreciate a lot the effort you put into reviewing other people's works. 

[Swick (ded) 436]

There you go: http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2013/250/4/f/the_tutorial__part_two_by_tenebris789-d6ldf4c.jpg

Thanks for the feedback. I do certainly appreciate a lot the effort you put into reviewing other people's works. 

Ooh, that's a really good tutorial. Probably the most in-depth one I've seen on pony skeletons. Good work, nothing bad that I could find. That'll be useful to me as well.

 

Well, to be honest, I didn't expect to get this many replies. :3 It give me something to do while helping others, though.

 

... This thread has mostly been me complimenting people because there's barely anything bad to point out. XP

Edited September 22, 2013 by Swick

[GeekBrony 85]

Okay. My mix is now uploaded to YouTube.

 

Previous Post:

 

Hello, I am a fellow DJ, but I feel I have gotten little to no support. I have DJ equipment and I love DJing, but sometimes I feel I am not getting attention at all. I only get about 1-3 listeners most of the time.

 

Here's an MP3 of my latest work (yeah I know 2 hours, but I think it is great). Please leave feedback.

 

http://www.x86cam.com/music/guaw/GetUpAndWub-TwoMixes-OneWeek.mp3

Link: http://www.x86cam.com/music/guaw/GetUpAndWub-TwoMixes-OneWeek.mp3

 

If it doesn't work, let me know.

 

Here is the video:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BlcMGz0-PFE

 

Enjoy and leave feedback if possible. Thanks

[Zygen 6,065]

Since you seem to be dieing for something terrible, feel free to have a taste of my first and only fanfic, which contains only two chapters which are both very short.

 

Throw in the fact i'm a terrible terrible writer and yeah.

 

Probably one of the most terrible things written, it may even compete with being worse then when i first drew pony art.

 

So anyways here if you dare to read more then the first small bit.

 

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/94420/the-mysterious-temple-treasure

 

I thought about writing like a whole chain story of multiple stories telling basically a life story of my ponysona, but i imagine that would be incredibly boring especially with how boring and crappy a writer I am.

 

So anyways, enjoy one of the crappiest stories you'll ever read, I don't even know if i can enjoy reading it, and i wrote it.

 

I doubt i'll go back to writing, but who knows, maybe i'll just write for myself for the heck of it, or maybe i'll miraculously actually be interesting to read like a good writer should be.

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,809]

Could you review this double piano version of Helping Twilight Win The Crown for me?

 

Link is found here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sAtRBhOw7KQ

[Swick (ded) 436]

-snip-

Stop being so hard on yourself. It's not bad at all, better than a lot of fanfics, really. Of course, it's not perfect. Here we go:

• There are missing apostrophes in a lot of places. Same with captilization.
• The personalities aren't 100% accurate. Spike and Twilight wouldn't have annoyed each other
• "Almost as if it was planned" *were
• "I suppose your right" No. NONONO. BAD. Your shows ownership. "Your ball, your cat, your pasta-eating walrus" You're is what you should've used. It's the contraction for "you are". "You're cool, you're stupid, you're a bagel-eating scorpion". "I suppose you are right."
• There are some run-on sentences that make it sounds like Pinkie Pie is reading the story. "Twilight on the other hand was busy trying to tell all of her friends about the Princess's letter and about their upcoming adventure to the Temple." could be something like "Twilight, on the other hand, was busy trying to tell all of her friends about the letter, and their upcoming adventure to the Temple."
• Also, when Twilight was at Fluttershy's house, the rain shouldn't have appeared out of nowhere. You should have used foreshadowing to hint that it was going to rain. Ex: "As Twilight left Applejack's she noticed the sky getting darker."

That's pretty much it. It's a pretty good fanfic. I'd like to see what happens next. You should write the next chapter.

Could you review this double piano version of Helping Twilight Win The Crown for me?

 

Link is found here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sAtRBhOw7KQ

Wow, you did that? It sounds really good! My only complaint is that the main melody was drowned out a lot of the time. Otherwise, it's really, really good.

[Zygen 6,065]

Stop being so hard on yourself. It's not bad at all, better than a lot of fanfics, really. Of course, it's not perfect. Here we go:

• There are missing apostrophes in a lot of places. Same with captilization.
• The personalities aren't 100% accurate. Spike and Twilight wouldn't have annoyed each other
• "Almost as if it was planned" *were
• "I suppose your right" No. NONONO. BAD. Your shows ownership. "Your ball, your cat, your pasta-eating walrus" You're is what you should've used. It's the contraction for "you are". "You're cool, you're stupid, you're a bagel-eating scorpion". "I suppose you are right."
• There are some run-on sentences that make it sounds like Pinkie Pie is reading the story. "Twilight on the other hand was busy trying to tell all of her friends about the Princess's letter and about their upcoming adventure to the Temple." could be something like "Twilight, on the other hand, was busy trying to tell all of her friends about the letter, and their upcoming adventure to the Temple."
• Also, when Twilight was at Fluttershy's house, the rain shouldn't have appeared out of nowhere. You should have used foreshadowing to hint that it was going to rain. Ex: "As Twilight left Applejack's she noticed the sky getting darker."

That's pretty much it. It's a pretty good fanfic. I'd like to see what happens next. You should write the next chapter.

well, if you know anything about me you should know I tend to be very very hard on myself.

its just one of those traits of mine that sticks around regardless to an extent.

 

I still think its kinda eh and could use a ton of brushing up, but eh.

 

Maybe its just one of those things that I shouldn't just write less then 3000 words in and go to the assumption i flat out suck at it.

 

I tend to do that alot, if I don't do something perfect at first I get frustrated and quit.

 

I appreciate the critique though, especially considering how bad I can be with English despite it being the only language I know fluently. 

 

I'm quite surprised you actually managed to read it all though. 

 

Its nice to hear that you atleast don't think it flat out sucks.

 

I might think about writing more, depends on how my schedule goes and my motivation in general(Both which are iffy, my motivation being something I am terrible at doing when it comes to anything.) i'm gonna have to re-read it to brush up my memory on what i was going to do in the first place. Not to mention do some editing.

 

Maybe i'll get to be better with experience, i mean my pony art is atleast bearable with experience.. So i assume the same could work for writing right?

 

Plus it would help me be better at English ;p.

 

but thanks, for reviewing it, and for the little confidence boost. I'll see if I can motivate myself to write some more tomorrow or something.