This is very wordy, and overall, a VERY long read!
Hello. I've had many ideas of an original character during the past few years, but only two made the cut. I'd like some insight into whether or not these characters are poorly written, bland, or given too much ability in comparison to their flaws. On a quick side note, this my first forum post that I've included ideas that I wanted to use, so I hope that I don't give a negative or remotely odd impression. I also wanted to mention that some concepts are borrowed from well known fantasy worlds (Dungeons and Dragons, Pathfinder,etc) All in all, feel free to give criticism at any time or pace.
Edit: I didn't expect the bio to be this long (I apologize for that, by the way)! I'll eventually introduce the second character.
First, I'll introduce Silver Ward, an earth pony. He's named for his talent, which encompasses most of the events he's experienced and will experience. Since his youth as a colt, he always admired the Royal Guard and their selfless sacrifice for the average civilian. For future purposes, I'd say my official age for him would be either 19 or 20. At either age, he still hasn't achieved his goal of been enlisted, but it would be wrong to say that he hasn't at least caught the Guard's attention.
Silver is physically capable and durable, like the majority of the earth pony population; he may even be in the above average range of such qualities. He has more of a wide, but not bulky, athletic build rather than lean. While he has his gifts, he also has flaws. Dexterity is something he clearly lacks. This can cause unfortunate occurrences such as applying too much pressure to a box holding a gift meant for a friend, or even breaking a seat and landing on the ground back-first. Not to mention his awkwardness around others, due to his constant struggle to vocalize his thoughts; it would be an understatement to say that it nearly always occurs during foreign or uncommon situations. The few people who get to know Silver have seen that his compassionate, noble, and honorable personality more than makes up for his shortcomings.
Silver's worse flaws include his very strict moral compass, and short temper in certain situations; especially when facing or witnessing unfair conflicts that are often than not involving somepony being outnumbered. His cutie mark is a shield that's half white and half black, with one dragon on each half facing the other's direction.
If you wanted to skim the text and reach the controversial point, here it is below.
Here's where I implemented the fantasy elements; It's well known within the fandom that mythological and fantastic creatures exist in FIM's canon universe. While dragons do exist as well, I wanted to implement two significant dragons to the mix: Bahamut and Tiamat. I planned on having him encounter both dragons, and am even leaning on implying that he encountered them 1 year ago. A stubborn search for a missing foalhood friend locked Silver in having no choice but to form a pact with not just one of the dragons, but another pact with the other; thus, he's trapped in serving two very powerful beings that are mortal enemies with each other.
BIGGEST POTENTIAL PLOT PROBLEM BELOW!
The situation isn't all negative, however. His pact with Bahamut enabled use of "divine light magic", allowing weak but useful healing ability, and also great potential for abjuration or defense oriented magic. His pact with Tiamut granted use of "DIvine dark magic", which includes a few dangerous offensive spells and gradually growing potential for spells that rely on his life-force(the self harm ranges from small to devastating). An unfortunate side effect of having both pacts brought about the problem of his personality sometimes shifting from one extreme to its opposite; he could be enthusiastic about helping his friends one day, then spontaneously shifting to secluding himself in his home for days.
This is pretty much the gist of my idea of Silver Ward. I wanted to know if I'm screwing up or making an overpowered character because of the divine magic situation. I'm trying to limit the utility of spells that evolve to only include defensive light magic, and life-force dependent dark magic; everything else remains static (level 1 healing permanently). This all was heavily inspired by the idea of a Paladin/Blackguard hybrid. What do any of you think? Since he's an earth pony, does this part override the idea of a balanced OC?
PS: I am VERY sorry for the wall of text!