music My First Song, Thoughts?

[NyxTheShield 91]

2 Days ago i downloaded FL Studio, so today i decided to compose somethings, this is how it ended:

 

http://www.goear.com...329/wip-2-wip-2

 

Thoughts ??

 

EDIT: Alternate Youtube link:

 

http-~~-//www.youtube.com/watch?v=kRvX4oe6Gtk&feature=youtu.be

 

(Since i was inspired by Luna/Nightmare Moon this should be on Pony art but whatever xD)

Edited March 29, 2012 by Felipe_9595

[Marcato 2,143]

Hey thats pretty catchy! I like it. Its just a bit repetitive at times, which is normal for one of your first songs. (Thats what it is right?) I did the opposite in my first song and it had no structure at all! Changed tunes every 5 seconds. XD dont do what i did.

[Big Bill Hell 123]

 nothing to see here, folks.

Edited December 24, 2015 by Big Bill Hell

[Shankveld 4,949]

[Jokuc 8,173]

 

[ProjectRKA 2,848]

Hey thats pretty catchy! I like it. Its just a bit repetitive at times,

 

This. What I'd if I were you is to make a climax in the track. Like, make it more intense.

Then have a break, and climax again.

I hope you can use the feedback

Edited March 29, 2012 by ProjectRKA

[Saiko 67]

I know nothing about music but this is nice to listen to, maybe not a masterpiece but definitely good. Listen to the advice given by the clever guys in here and keep up the good work, you seem to have hell of potential:)

[ZomBrony 347]

can you just leave the /watch URL for me? IE doesn't let me watch the videos the way they'd normally work, and the forums shorten the link, so I can't copy and paste either

[Eenohay 318]

 

I second this

 

Hmm, It reminds me of something I did a while ago. You know what, I'm gonna upload for people here

Edited April 2, 2012 by Eenohay

[Handgasm 9]

I second this

 

Hmm, It reminds me of something I did a while ago. You know what, I'm gonna upload for people here

 

I third it.

[Ice Storm 1,020]

Great song for you're first go. the only thing I really noticed in the song was when you started using Melodic Minor towards the midway point. There were some half step drops that didn't really make sense in the context of the music around it and it sounded a bit off key. I really like it though, there isn't enough piano music being written anymore, and sadly, I've moved on from piano, so I can't really help contribute to it. Keep up the good work though. If this is your first, I can't wait to see some of the other stuff you can do.