The Cruise of Your Life (Sneak Peek)

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Well hey guys. I'm a huge musician, and I've always been a pianist at heart. But sometimes, I like to compose. So here. It's going to be a musical number based on a roleplay that's recently finished: "A Tropical Odyssey". It's a bit turgid but the vocals make everything drag. I can't sing, so yeah. It's a work in progress and I was hoping you guys could give some constructive criticism on how to make it more tropical and playful. Thanks!

 

For this song, what happens is that the alto singer (a small foal) goes into a cave and finds a ship. He brings it out with DJ for everypony to see. That's when the musical number starts.

 

Here's the first verse lyrics:

 

Being stranded on this island,

Nowhere to run or hide.

Not wanting to be near the sand,

I went to the jungle with stride!

 

While we were searching for a way back home,

our lives were a misery to see!

But e'en our sorry sight he went out to roam,

and found us a ship to be free!

 

Here's the link:

http://www.mediafire.com/?rash1arw4rd67x8

 

I hope you enjoy!