Friendship is magic [DEMO]

[Maxey 13]

This is a song i managed to write and record all in this weekend (its amazing what you can do when MLP isnt on)

The performance and production issues are too numerous to mention but it was fun anyway.

I would love any feedback on how i can improve it for when I do a proper recording of it, especially with the lyrics.

 

http://soundcloud.co...p-is-magic-demo

 

Lyrics:

Life is so much simpler

When there is no one else you need

And no one there

To ever let you down

 

I never have time to go out at night

I never have time to communicate

It never seemed to make any logical sence

But now im, sat here

Writing to you about all ive learned

And I can truely say ive never felt this good

 

CHORUS

So, just be kind to all that you see

Laugh out loud at all that you fear

And be honest with yourself

And everyone you care for

Loyalty to the ones you trust

Share your love with all around you

And when you feeling down

stick by your friends cause friendship is magic

 

Now that my fears are put to rest

Now that my heart is willing

I need you all to teach me the rest

Sometimes when I am on my own

Sometimes when I cant sleep

I close my eyes and see five ponys there

no one's better on their own

 

CHORUS

 

I thought that true happiness

Lay in the pages of a book, but honestly

I dont think I ever felt this good

with all you by my side yeah

 

CHORUS

[Apple Bloom 2,933]

That's pretty good! I'm not musically talented so I can't give you any advice but I look forward to hearing the final version.

[Mephala 2,633]

I liked it FINAL VERSION NOW.

[Maxey 13]

Thanks guys. Ill try and re record it ASAP.