Hazardus_Havard.

I am currently just finishing up a oneshot story involving Rainbow Dash and you spending some time together. It should be getting confirmed for publication on the FimFiction site sometime soon, I hope. Here's a link to me, if anyone would be interested in reading it later. I like feedback, if anyone has any to provide on my stories. http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Hazardus_Havard Other than that, gonna take some time to watch some GameGrumps. I was JUST doing that too, since I thought my computer was messing up. Turns out I just need some Thermal Paste. Better make sure you have some spare Thermal Paste around along with some aircans, never know when you may need it. B-but my mom wouldn't do such a thing... right?

One thousand dollars. That's a hard choice. Not because it's a lot of money just for the average citizen to have, but because there's a decision I'd have to make. Do I use it now and get an Intuos? Or do I save it up for the Cintiq? And if anyone must know, these are drawing tablets. The first, is a really heavy duty type of drawing tablet, It'll get the job done, and it's nice. The second, it allows you to literally see everything you draw. Much like you were to take your monitor, grab a pen, and start drawing like that with Photoshop or GIMP.

Why would you want those games? I'm not saying they're bad, but there's so many more out there. For instance, I really want X-Com but can't afford it right now. That game looks massive. I would recommend that for something to buy. As for the other games... This is what I do. I watch videos on those games, and choose what I buy. But who, out of the thousands of people on websites and predominately YouTube, should you go for such videos? Cynical Brit. He's an ass at judging games, and fairly thorough. He does first impression videos, to show people how they play on a first glance and without being pushed to say 'this games great' or 'it's horrible'. Here's some vids to those games. FarCry3 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EvMQAkoue6w Hitman Absolution http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dluMZCa5wIk Black Ops II Single player http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TYAE-EzUwh0 Black Ops Multiplayer http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oNLbJKs1jmI Sadly, he does not have an Assassins Creed 3 video. But these three should make choosing much easier. And if you're wondering, he has an enormous amount of videos just like these for many other games that may interest you. Edit - It looks like the Black Ops videos, you'll just need to highlight them, right click, then go the the link that way to view the video.

There's absolutely nothing wrong with your picture, other than some simple clean ups that need to be done. Some people like this type of art style. There's people out there that do simple comics based off how you're drawing. Now, don't think you can't improve on your style. Maybe you could find a better way to draw the mouth,nose, muzzle, whatever you want to call it. Always attempt to improve on how you do your art, maybe you'll find different ways to draw wings to give your art a nice flair of appeal to being different for each piece. And please, don't get sucked into drawing those manga stylized eyes that is easy to recognize as those 'sailor moon' eyes. Try something different, or simple. Example, this person here. -> Blindsight. See the eyes in the avatar that is used? Those would look wonderful if you did that on your characters.

Are you implying I somehow got this computer, that I had to work for and save just to get, was a gift? And the same for this internet? I was stating that I would not be receiving anything, and was making fun of my own self at that with the meal comment.

Well, be happy that you're getting much of anything. And I hope it's a Duncan, those things are awesome. I'm getting a meal for Christmas. What's that? You're talking about just gifts overall, and that meals are what's to be expected on Christmas day? Oh. Well then. I'm getting nothing.

Let's think on characters they will most likely use for this next game that, sadly, won't come out for another 2 YEARS. They will most likely keep their entire cast from the last game, and possibly subtract characters from the last one. It's expensive to re-license such as Snake and Sonic, whom aren't even Nintendo exclusives. Why do you think Raiden was in All Stars Battle-Royale, and that word is Snake may make an appearance in that game as well? They got it licensed to be in their game. They probably wont add in characters that make absolutely no sense or are just overpowered (Goku) Or characters from other franchises (Master Chief) Characters they may add in? Things dealing with Nintendo franchise, or had dealt with them before, or will be dealing with them in the near future (Bayonetta, Rayman, Banjo-Kazooie, Viewtiful Joe) And for anyone thinking our favorite cast of ponies would make an appearance - well, that's actually reasonable to think. Remember the pokemon character in the last game? I can imagine them switching out the mane six like that for different move sets, using them in the game. They seem reasonable for the game. Now, they just have to be proven it's a good idea to have them in their character slots of chosen fighters.

So, I've been writing this for a while now. Fixing it, making it more filled with interesting things; I'm hoping to get some good stuff out there to read. Any feedback is appreciated on what I have right now. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/70801/1/an-alien-walks-amongst-us/prologue--you-just-have-to-believe Description - Lyra, a simple pony with simple dreams. Dreams involving aliens, that is. Her fascination with them even got her a job dealing with them, though no one takes it seriously. Lyra hopes to one day be able to meet one, she just needs to believe. In comes a human, whom mysteriously gets transported to Equestria. It's up to Lyra to show the alien the ways of her people! The power of friendship, magic and hugs await her on this strange adventure. Location of where the image can be found - http://www.deviantart.com/morelikethis/279309067#/d4mak97

I personally like all forms of music. Right now, I seem to be slipping into some Abney Park for a Steampunk sound that gives you some swing in there. Though, if you like yourself some classical, maybe mixing of electronica and classical would be something you'd be of interest in?

Why exactly are they crying? There's no context as to a reasoning for them to be crying. Without that, it's not a very good feels comic. Give us a reason to empathize with your characters, cause otherwise we, as viewers, only see two OC's crying. And we're going to question why the entire time. Unless you're just wanting to draw a comic of two OC's crying and hugging one another for no other reason than just to see it happen. And if that's all you really want, just do that on a single image for your drawing. That way, you can have more attention to that one image over the actual comic.

I just have a little more experience at writing. I've done some college courses, and have been writing fanfic stories to improve my writing for a few months now. I also nitpick at other peoples stories, seeing where things go wrong or could be improved, for my own needs on improving my own writing. If you ever need some feedback again, just give me a message, I'll try and pick up as soon as I can do so.

It's nice to see someone that does art here not taken from pre-made vectors of other peoples sources. The only real thing I see that's pretty off is her tail. It looks like it's connected to her back, instead of being attached where a tail normally is. Maybe next time you can have the tail further down, lying on the ground where she is sitting? You could still produce that little pomf of hers with the tail.

Well, if you ever want, just give me a holler and I can try and point some things out if you would like some help. I do Vector Illustrations myself, though I'm trying to branch off to a painterly type of art. Not working, gonna try combining the two when my tablet stops being stupid and wants to work with me (I'm putting it in a time out.) If you want some examples, my DA Account in my Sig is there, and all but the last thing I've posted on my account is Vector art. Just to give you an idea on what some simple vectoring can do. Guess I should also point out I may not be on this too much, so don't think I'm ignoring you if I don't reply quickly.

Well, first off, you've placed what you've written twice. So that might make people who read this less prone into a reply here, try and edit that double post out. Second, most people do not like self insert stories. Say what you will, but how it reads, it gives of a self insertion story here. The only thing more disliked that those are Mary Sue/Marty Stu stories. Third, I write fanfiction stories myself, though I will not post them here since they are more T-M ratings and would most likely ban me from this site. But from what I've read, you need to change some things. First, remove that 'Chapter One - Part One' thing. I doubt anyone really cares about that, in fact, most of the time when you imply a part, we expect a lengthy chapter which would give reason to parts in a chapter. On that note, Second, reconsider lengthening your chapters. That's more or less up to you, but personally, I prefer longer fics that go out of their way to make a huge world full of life, over someone rambling about having a character live with ponies, or just a way too simple slice of life. Now, for what you wrote. There are some spelling and grammatical errors in your story. The thing I have problems with is how you go about describing your story. The most notable, would be your bedding's. Why do you need to describe them to us, the reader? Do they have importance in the story or will they be used later as a plot device? If not, try not to over describe your scene, it just complicates manners when people read them. Instead, describe how the guy is feeling. He's who we care about as a reader, after all. If he's not interesting, then we do not care. That is also a major reason as to why most readers hate self inserts. Because the writer may, intentional or not, shove their feelings into the character. Unless you make the reader care, don't do this. And finally, here's a retype of how you could take things in your story. DO NOT, I repeat, DO NOT THINK this is how it should go. You may take your story in any direction you feel, just use my retyping as something to think on and maybe look at for future writings. X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X-X I open my eyes, sleep slowly casting off of my mind and body. The darkness of my room forced me to look over at my clock, uncertain of the time. Six-thirteen a.m. School would start soon, needed to be ready. Pushing my blankets away, I slide off the bed, stretching myself awake. A satisfying crack in my back did just that. Walking over to my closet, I skimmed over what I would choose as my garb for the day. My gray and black striped hoodie was a fine choice I thought, taking that. Placing that aside, I grabbed the rest of my clothing without much thought. In a drone like fashion, I started undressing and redressing into my clothes. My thoughts idled off, thinking of school. The teachers that give us a hard time, the hard lessons and studies they enforce on us. It got hard at times, sort wish it would go away. Finishing up, I grab my backpack and head out the room. Opening my door, it let out a horrid, creaking noise that roared throughout the house. At least, that's how it appeared to me. Really, I was the only one that should be awake right now. My younger sister should be awake soon, we'd both have to leave for the bus after she got herself ready. Walking to the living room, I looked over at a clock. Almost six-thirty, when my sister woke up. Bus came around seven-ten. Plenty of time to myself, I thought, as I sat myself in front of the computer. Turning on the lamp for an extra source of light, I pressed the power button of the tower, booting the computer up. I guess a final note on what I wrote. No, it is not perfect. There are even mistakes in there I can see after typing, but given I took only five-ten minutes on it, not bad without doing a cleanup on it. Still, just take this as an idea as how you could write it. And take my criticisms as that, a critical point of view from another source, not as something that another person posted to make fun of your writings.

Just a simple bit of criticism, and I'm glad you saw just that. It wasn't to invoke any type of anger to you, though I'm saddened to admit so many others have made way to anger much more easily. One arm, eh? I know that is a difficult thing to get over, what with how I've seen people in those binds as well. Maybe for the time being, you could be a clean up artist? Like, people already have the sketches up and ready, but want vectored illustrations. You could do that for the time being, just put up something stating you need practice and would vector 'simple' images at first, cleaning them up with vector and providing color schemes as the sketch artist and you seem fit for it. Just an idea for the time being, until your hand is either fixed or you can manage drawing with your other hand.

Well, it's obvious you used pre-made vectored bodies, from how easily recognizable the bottom one is (Trixie on top of Twilight) You should at some point try and create your own bodies, to truly make it your own work. Do some simple sketches, then vectorize over where you want the work. As for the coloring you've done here, the white under the dark red is way too striking for a pony with black hair. You should think of a light pink instead of the white, and lighten up on the darkness in the red. It looks like you tried to make her namesake, Roseblush, obvious with the coloring. If you want to do that, just add in a blush tone under her eyes. It won't have you forced making those gradients all over her body, and it'll give a nice, cute appearance on her as well. Her hair. It's way too black, too striking from her red body. Looking at that cutie mark, it's blue color makes it a focal point to look at, as in with that one thing out of all the dark colors, it's what people first see. So try and make her hair a lighter, blue color, it'll help make her look softer to look at, not personality wise but image wise. Oh, and one last thing. I JUST noticed the top one has wings, but the bottom one does not. Try and fix that. In the very least, the bottom one should have the wings folded alongside the body, if even shown a little to give the appearance of a Pegasus. Or, just subtract the wings from the top image altogether. Your choice.

It's not bad, good for a very first vector. Of course, you DID forget the cutie mark. The lines in her mane, you could try next time to make them fat in certain areas and tip them at their ends. Also, make sure they go along with the mane or tails as they bend. Same with much of the lines in fact. Like on her body or near her back legs. The mane near her neck, it looks awkward to see it shove out that far from the body. Try next time to have it swoop along the neck, it'll feel more natural. What you have here would look great for an avatar, though I strongly recommend you touch up some of the details in it. The cutie mark is a very important part of any ponies persona. Maybe after that you can make more of these with other ponies? I'd like to see a Lyra one myself.

That color for the paper looks very off with the image, hard for me to see it without wondering why white paper couldn't be acquired for better processing to computer. But that's just me nitpicking there. The only real problem I have is her mane. The back of her head's neckline with the mane looks nice, fits well with her tail. The top of her head though not so much. Looks like you were staring at an Octavia picture for a bit too long when drawing her, maybe you could add in those nice lines from her neckline hair to the top of her head? It just looks really off in a design choice, like you tried mashing two ponies into one. Other than the mane everything looks nice. Like the ink used, the use of curves in certain areas like her legs, it looks nice and clean. Paper could be white but that's a small flaw to my own choosing there. And one final thing, next time try and center the image and not crop off her ear/tail from the image before presenting to others for a more better judgement and critique. For all I know you have a little bow at the end of her tail, or the tips of her ear hold a very small but of an earing or its swished at the tip in a stylized way.