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[Jack Baker 698]

Hey, so I had been thinking of adding a new character in.

 

He's another Persona user, but more experienced than Raze, and I wanted him to be kind of like a mentor to Raze so he would learn how to control his new power.

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/crow-talon-r9776

 

Basically, he's an assassin.

It's not finished yet, it might take a while for me to flesh out the whole backstory and such, but I wanted to know if what I have so far is good, or if there's anything I should change.

Edited November 19, 2016 by Detective Adachi

[Techno Universal 2,575]

I actually did do a new backstory for my OC.

It's above this post!!!

[Hazard Time 1,127]

I actually did do a new backstory for my OC.

It's above this post!!!

 

If you're talking about the last post you made in this thread, a GM reviewed it and did not approve of it.  Read @@Fractured's latest post to get an idea of what needs to be improved.

 

If you mean that you've taken his advice and rewrote your backstory, could you provide a link to it or copy and paste it here?

[Jack Baker 698]

So... are people gonna ignore my last post...?

[Hazard Time 1,127]

So... are people gonna ignore my last post...?

 

As I said in my last OOC post, I'm just waiting on @ to respond.

 

I might be able to get a new reply out, but I'll try and see if doing so doesn't end up sidelining anyone.

Edited November 19, 2016 by Hazard Time

[Jack Baker 698]

As I said in my last OOC post, I'm just waiting on @ to respond.

 

I might be able to get a new reply out, but I'll try and see if doing so doesn't end up sidelining anyone.

No I meant the one I made on this thread XD

[J.R. 3,183]

Hey, so I had been thinking of adding a new character in.

 

He's another Persona user, but more experienced than Raze, and I wanted him to be kind of like a mentor to Raze so he would learn how to control his new power.

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/crow-talon-r9776

 

Basically, he's an assassin.

It's not finished yet, it might take a while for me to flesh out the whole backstory and such, but I wanted to know if what I have so far is good, or if there's anything I should change.

First thing's first: Can you explain his powers?

[Jack Baker 698]

@J.R.

Well first, he has his Persona, Throne. I was going to write in that he has the ability to cast fire magic, and one greater healing spell that can be used once every five hours.

 

The second power... you might wanna sit down and really analyze this one.

 

The second power he has would come from one of his assassination missions, where he and his mentor were hired by the Trottingham College of Mages to kill an insane rogue mage rumored to be extracting dark magic from mysterious black crystals found near the edge of the Crystal Empire, hidden remnants of King Sombra's former reign. The mage captured him and killed his mentor, with the mage telling Crow about how he would use this magic to wreak havoc on the world once extracted. However, it backfires, and the magic ends up going to Crow (which I will explain how and why in greater detail in his bio).

The magic is weak, however, and transforms itself into lesser powers befitting an assassin, which I call his Dark Magic Abilities (incoming blatant Dishonored powers):

 

First, the ability to blink short distances (about 12 ft. horizontally and vertically)

 

Second, the ability to possess the bodies of small creatures (I.e. bugs and rats) for 15 seconds.

 

Finally, the ability to create a blast of wind that can knock a normal sized pony off of his/her feet, and push them back with great speeds (great for making an assassination look like an act of God!). Can also be used to deflect small projectiles, like bullets whether physical or magical. Magic spells that are beams or continuous streams of magic will not be affected.

 

Also, since he isn't a unicorn, Crow only has whatever amount of dark magic energy he absorbed on that day. It's self replenishing, but if he uses it all up in one go, it will take 10 minutes to build up again before he can use it again. Also, this magic has linked itself to the summoning of his Persona, so summoning Throne costs a fair bit of dark energy (if he wants to summon Throne without dark energy, it will have to be at the cost of some of his own physical life force). However, his dark magic energy works differently depending if he uses his own Dark Magic Powers or summons his Persona. When it comes to abilities, the energy is separated into two parts: Usable Energy and Maximum Energy. The amount of Maximum Energy limits how much Usable Energy Crow has, and Usable Energy recharges up to whatever amount of Maximum Energy is left. How much left he has of each depends on how he uses one of the three Dark Magic powers he has:

 

His blink, if used once, with deplete Usable, but not Maximum, waiting for three seconds will recharge it, using again immediately afterwards will take a chunk of both.

 

His possession ability, when used once, will always take a large chunk of Usable Energy, but a varying amount of Maximum Energy. The amount gets large the more times he uses it in one go.

 

His wind blast ability has the same energy absorption rate as possession, but with more lenient amounts.

 

Also, in terms of Dark Magic Powers: if Usable Energy reaches zero, but Maximum does not, Crow has not run out of magic energy.

 

Now, for the amount of times Crow can use his abilities (and this is just a general idea):

 

Crow can blink 10 times consecutively before his energy is fully depleted.

 

He can use his possession ability 5 times if he waits between casts, and 3 times if constantly switches bodies, before recharging.

 

He can wind blast 6 times if he waits between casts and 4 times if he constantly blows wind, before recharging.

 

 

Oh, and when it comes to Persona summoning, in terms of Usable and Maximum Energy, they decrease at the same rate. He can summon his Persona 3 times before recharging.

 

And that's everything. This is still very much a work in progress, so I apologize if some things seem unclear or OP (tbh I think the whole Dark Magic Powers are a bit OP myself, but I'll leave that decision up to the DMs and change it, completely rework it or remove it even, if necessary. I just wanted to include everything I had envisioned for this character to be put up for evaluation).

Edited November 21, 2016 by Detective Adachi

[Techno Universal 2,575]

Well I've tried to fix his backstory a bit so it's more understandable!!!

 

Well it started when a dragon destroyed a mountain in a battle with the main 6 around 5 years ago. When the mountain collapsed they noticed a strange grey Alicorn in the rocks with black shiny eyes that looked like LED screens. When Twilight examined the rocks a bit more she said that whatever that Alicorn is he has been buried in solid rock for more than 2000 years. So they took him back to Twilight's lab and called the princesses over. Princess Luna did remember a strange blue astroid that had ones and zeros in its glowing trail. It impacted into that very same mountain when it was a active volcano around 2000 years ago. So they started studying him further and eventually they accidentally opened a maintenance panel where his wing was revealing he was some sort of indestructible and futuristic robot as he was made out of a unknown metal and Twilight said that he must of been indestructible to survive incineration from landing in a active volcano. And there was a strange motor looking device inside that had a information plate on it that read: UNIVERSAL ENERGY GENERATOR DESIGNED FOR UNIT: UA:001 TECHNO UNIVERSAL

MANUFACTURED BY: CELESTIAL LABS.INC © 2045

So Twilight thought she could get the generator started so she zapped it with magic and it lit up with blue lines on it and even the cables in the hach all lit up as if he was coming back to life. And his eyes lit up displaying a boot-up screen saying: ALSTROME-RUNNING AUTO BRAIN REBOOT...

And within a few seconds his eyes went normal and his main and tail lit up and started flowing. He first asked how long has it been since the accident. The ponies had no idea what accident he was talking about so they replied with what was the accident? And he said he couldn't remember much and all he could remember was who he was. Apparently he was a word leader that monitored everything. He then remembered the universal energy technology's that he invented in the beginning of his life. So he started introducing them to equestria. They where computers that where able to use magic as it was also known as universal energy. He then decided to build his lab in Bangcolt that was a huge underground tunnel system under the city. Currently Techno lives in his lab and assists with royalty but he still hasn't learned most of his capabilities yet. He did do training battles with Twilight and Discord around a year after his discovery to try and relearn his abilities. He dose of course knows by this point that he is a brain connected to a auto command system in his robotic body. It did eventually come back to him of what happened in the incident. He was a chosen word leader on earth because of his discovery of universal energy that is the same thing as equestrian magic. The accident happened when he was destroying a rocky planet that was on a impact corse with earth. He remembers there was a strange interference with his system that caused a series of uncontrollable glitches as when he impacted into the planet his sheld cut out the moment he hit causing him to take severe damage to his chest area also damaging the generator. His auto repair system did its thing and instantly repaired him. But it was too late as he started to lose energy in his system as there wasn't enough energy left from the generator leaking to keep the generator's energy production loop going. His system then glitched again and caused him to port to another universe. He then was drifting at over 50,000kmh towards equestria. He was unable to do everything at this point as his system was shutting down and putting his brain into hyper sleep. And the last thing he remembered was the hot glowing red from the lava in the volcano. He doesn't know for sure what caused the strange glitches but he does think that it was Likely a interference with his command line from a external hack attempt. And to this day still can't remember the universal location of earth so currently he is stuck in equestria.

 

So hopefully this backstory fits in better for the RP!!!

Edited November 21, 2016 by Techno Universal

[P-Jay 1,987]

alright, I've hit that level of 'I'm bored' that I'll just go ahead and reply to you two. XD

 

Well first, he has his Persona, Throne. I was going to write in that he has the ability to cast fire magic, and one greater healing spell that can be used once every five hours.

The second power... you might wanna sit down and really analyze this one.

The second power he has would come from one of his assassination missions, where he and his mentor were hired by the Trottingham College of Mages to kill an insane rogue mage rumored to be extracting dark magic from mysterious black crystals found near the edge of the Crystal Empire, hidden remnants of King Sombra's former reign. The mage captured him and killed his mentor, with the mage telling Crow about how he would use this magic to wreak havoc on the world once extracted. However, it backfires, and the magic ends up going to Crow (which I will explain how and why in greater detail in his bio).
The magic is weak, however, and transforms itself into lesser powers befitting an assassin, which I call his Dark Magic Abilities (incoming blatant Dishonored powers):

First, the ability to blink short distances (about 12 ft. horizontally and vertically)

Second, the ability to possess the bodies of small creatures (I.e. bugs and rats) for 15 seconds.

Finally, the ability to create a blast of wind that can knock a normal sized pony off of his/her feet, and push them back with great speeds (great for making an assassination look like an act of God!). Can also be used to deflect small projectiles, like bullets whether physical or magical. Magic spells that are beams or continuous streams of magic will not be affected.

Also, since he isn't a unicorn, Crow only has whatever amount of dark magic energy he absorbed on that day. It's self replenishing, but if he uses it all up in one go, it will take 10 minutes to build up again before he can use it again. Also, this magic has linked itself to the summoning of his Persona, so summoning Throne costs a fair bit of dark energy (if he wants to summon Throne without dark energy, it will have to be at the cost of some of his own physical life force). However, his dark magic energy works differently depending if he uses his own Dark Magic Powers or summons his Persona. When it comes to abilities, the energy is separated into two parts: Usable Energy and Maximum Energy. The amount of Maximum Energy limits how much Usable Energy Crow has, and Usable Energy recharges up to whatever amount of Maximum Energy is left. How much left he has of each depends on how he uses one of the three Dark Magic powers he has:

His blink, if used once, with deplete Usable, but not Maximum, waiting for three seconds will recharge it, using again immediately afterwards will take a chunk of both.

His possession ability, when used once, will always take a large chunk of Usable Energy, but a varying amount of Maximum Energy. The amount gets large the more times he uses it in one go.

His wind blast ability has the same energy absorption rate as possession, but with more lenient amounts.

Also, in terms of Dark Magic Powers: if Usable Energy reaches zero, but Maximum does not, Crow has not run out of magic energy.

Now, for the amount of times Crow can use his abilities (and this is just a general idea):

Crow can blink 10 times consecutively before his energy is fully depleted.

He can use his possession ability 5 times if he waits between casts, and 3 times if constantly switches bodies, before recharging.

He can wind blast 6 times if he waits between casts and 4 times if he constantly blows wind, before recharging.


Oh, and when it comes to Persona summoning, in terms of Usable and Maximum Energy, they decrease at the same rate. He can summon his Persona 3 times before recharging.

And that's everything. This is still very much a work in progress, so I apologize if some things seem unclear or OP (tbh I think the whole Dark Magic Powers are a bit OP myself, but I'll leave that decision up to the DMs and change it, completely rework it or remove it even, if necessary. I just wanted to include everything I had envisioned for this character to be put up for evaluation).

You...Well...I wont deny that you're ambitious. PM roleplay if you will, I'll be the judge if this character is...'Fair', or not, for Bangcolt. After all, learning by beating the shit out of eachother, it's way better than reading a bio, eh?

 

Well I've tried to fix his backstory a bit so it's more understandable!!!

Well it started when a dragon destroyed a mountain in a battle with the main 6 around 5 years ago. When the mountain collapsed they noticed a strange grey Alicorn in the rocks with black shiny eyes that looked like LED screens. When Twilight examined the rocks a bit more she said that whatever that Alicorn is he has been buried in solid rock for more than 2000 years. So they took him back to Twilight's lab and called the princesses over. Princess Luna did remember a strange blue astroid that had ones and zeros in its glowing trail. It impacted into that very same mountain when it was a active volcano around 2000 years ago. So they started studying him further and eventually they accidentally opened a maintenance panel where his wing was revealing he was some sort of indestructible and futuristic robot as he was made out of a unknown metal and Twilight said that he must of been indestructible to survive incineration from landing in a active volcano. And there was a strange motor looking device inside that had a information plate on it that read: UNIVERSAL ENERGY GENERATOR DESIGNED FOR UNIT: UA:001 TECHNO UNIVERSAL
MANUFACTURED BY: CELESTIAL LABS.INC © 2045
So Twilight thought she could get the generator started so she zapped it with magic and it lit up with blue lines on it and even the cables in the hach all lit up as if he was coming back to life. And his eyes lit up displaying a boot-up screen saying: ALSTROME-RUNNING AUTO BRAIN REBOOT...
And within a few seconds his eyes went normal and his main and tail lit up and started flowing. He first asked how long has it been since the accident. The ponies had no idea what accident he was talking about so they replied with what was the accident? And he said he couldn't remember much and all he could remember was who he was. Apparently he was a word leader that monitored everything. He then remembered the universal energy technology's that he invented in the beginning of his life. So he started introducing them to equestria. They where computers that where able to use magic as it was also known as universal energy. He then decided to build his lab in Bangcolt that was a huge underground tunnel system under the city. Currently Techno lives in his lab and assists with royalty but he still hasn't learned most of his capabilities yet. He did do training battles with Twilight and Discord around a year after his discovery to try and relearn his abilities. He dose of course knows by this point that he is a brain connected to a auto command system in his robotic body. It did eventually come back to him of what happened in the incident. He was a chosen word leader on earth because of his discovery of universal energy that is the same thing as equestrian magic. The accident happened when he was destroying a rocky planet that was on a impact corse with earth. He remembers there was a strange interference with his system that caused a series of uncontrollable glitches as when he impacted into the planet his sheld cut out the moment he hit causing him to take severe damage to his chest area also damaging the generator. His auto repair system did its thing and instantly repaired him. But it was too late as he started to lose energy in his system as there wasn't enough energy left from the generator leaking to keep the generator's energy production loop going. His system then glitched again and caused him to port to another universe. He then was drifting at over 50,000kmh towards equestria. He was unable to do everything at this point as his system was shutting down and putting his brain into hyper sleep. And the last thing he remembered was the hot glowing red from the lava in the volcano.

So hopefully this backstory fits in better for the RP!!!

 

Techno...Buddy...How long have you been roleplaying?

 

'Indestructible'? History with Twilight? Throws down with Discord? You reworded most of your backstory, but didn't change much. His origins are a tad clearer, but...He'd wreck anything that happened to tick him off, defeating the entire purpose of Bangcolt at it's core.

 

Just, did you even read Fractured's sin post? XD Sorry if I come off as an asshole, but this character would fit better in...Well...A world where his character would actually be comprehensible to the inhabitants. Something like Halo, or Destiny, maybe--he'd fit right in, even if he'd still come off as a little ridiculous. 

 

But Equestria? My friend, such an advanced character, with human origins, absurd amounts of power, and to top it off, a 'matrix type' gimmick...It just doesn't fit in MLP. Sorry bud... 

[Jack Baker 698]

@P-Jay

So like... you want me to do a PM RP with you? Like totally unrelated to this one?

[P-Jay 1,987]

Yeah. To 'test out' your character. All those abilities and self-rules sound fair enough on paper...But I wanna see how exactly you'll be roleplaying him. XD

[Jack Baker 698]

Ok. So what's the premise? Who will I be fighting?

[P-Jay 1,987]

I'll explain in the PM.

[Jack Baker 698]

CMON RP; LIVE, DAMMIT, LIVE!!!!!!!!!!

Edited December 10, 2016 by Detective Adachi

[Vae Victis 742]

OKAY.... hopefully that is the absolute last hiatus I have to take. Now that I'm out of school, I should be able to RP freely without any further interruptions. XD

[Jack Baker 698]

So it appears I have gotten the ok from P-Jay to use my new character.

 

I'll start with him right away, just letting everyone know. I need to take a break from this self-made train wreck that is Raze's story anyway. At least until Guts gets another post in.

Edited December 19, 2016 by Detective Adachi

[Jack Baker 698]

...Who is this new person?

[Not Yellow Diamond 925]

 

 

...Who is this new person?

 

New? I'm a DM. Whatcha talkin' about new? I should have you banned for such blasphemy. 

[Jack Baker 698]

@,

Look, it's been too long since I've actually been here, and it looks like you may have changed your name. I only know certain DMs.

Edited December 21, 2016 by Detective Adachi

[Not Yellow Diamond 925]

@,

Look, it's been too long since I've actually been here, and it looks like you changed your name. I only know certain DMs.

By the power invested in me, I decree you on probation! From now on, I demand to be called sir! I also demand to be treated pretty, like one of those dogs Paris Hilton carries around in her purse. Any step out of line, and you're toast like Fractured's soul, and possibly his uh... "largest organ." Yeah...

[Jack Baker 698]

@,

...I don't know how to respond to that.

 

And I just checked your profile, and realized it's Tacoma. Good to see you, how's Simon Says? 

[Not Yellow Diamond 925]

Simon says has been just grand. But I've seen to misplaced it along with my knitting kit, unfortunately. 

 

Finally getting back into the temporary swing of things here in Bangcolt. Mostly joking around but... uh, have to say something RP related, so feel free to ignore my yellow stallion of... uh... I just thought of it on the top of my head XD 

[Jack Baker 698]

@,

 

Alright then.

 

Btw, it was Corvo... the new character is based off of Corvo Attano... not... Steve Hoofscemi, whatever that is. I don't even... you know what, forget it.

[Unicorncob 5,677]

@

 

*looks at Raze, then this new pony*

 

...Iiiiiiiiiiiiii get the feeling you don't like Jack or Double Play