critique wanted My first fanfiction in english

[Redhatbrony 59]

Hallo everybrony,

 

please excuse my doublepost.

I'm not sure, wether my english is really bad, or it's just sound so?

But with your help, i will find the truth.

Please help me and guide me to a better understanding of these language.

 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZzZ23ljIJKF7JYnX3hxNujt_jJq2_XdHRR-fuaw_YlQ/edit?usp=sharing

 

This is my first translated fanfiction.

The main character seems to be  familiar to us.

A young pegasusfilly with an undoubtful well knwon apperance.

 

Review and enjoy quite a little bit.

 

[Black Sabbath 2,484]

I must say that the name wingdaloo sounds a little to silly. 

[Redhatbrony 59]

I have thought it matched both the love for cooking and the Pegasus origin of the main charakter.

It sounds like Vindaloo Curry.