Need some help with fanfic...

[mehguy22 64]

I'm working on a fan fic about my 2 OC's who are twins, and I don't really have much so far. About 6 chapters plus a prologue each taking up 1-4 pages, with small-ish font... I suggest you read it before giving suggestions though.

Edited August 17, 2013 by mehguy22

[Scootadress 361]

On whatever I read it up on, I see each chapter in one giant paragraph that's separated by the chapter titles. Can you separate phrases and quotes? It sounds promising, just structural problems. I'm also guessing you should probably describe everything when the time comes. (I.e:The home layout and that sort of thing) If you lump it like that, it feels less cluttered, plus, the reader would know the home better.

Edited August 17, 2013 by Scootadress

[mehguy22 64]

Alright, thanks! I'll get to it sometime. I haven't really been able to get to it too often, so it'll be a while. But, once again, thank  you for the tips! 

 

[EDIT]

Pulled it all together! Here's the little change list:

 

+Slapped paragraphs in and separated conversation quotes

*Simplified prologue, cut it u and spread it out throughout chapters, along with removing some parts

Edited August 17, 2013 by mehguy22