Pink Swirl *OC* *Please Criticize*

[Slice0Pie 815]

My friends NEW OC. Excuse me, for a moment. ~Walks off cliff~

Ok, took about 20-30 minutes to draw. It was hard filling in the colors.

Her new OC

Criticize, not the drawing, but her OC

She is a baker!

[Greyhawk 100]

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My friends NEW OC. Excuse me, for a moment. ~Walks off cliff~

Ok, took about 20-30 minutes to draw. It was hard filling in the colors.

Her new OC

Criticize, not the drawing, but her OC

She is a baker!

 

 

Well the thing is, if it's OC in general that you wanted us to critique on, we need more details about your OC. At the moment, all I get from is that she is a baker. For instance, who is she? what does she do? What's her personality is like? What cutiemark has she got.? Something like that.

Edited September 16, 2013 by Greyhawk

[Slice0Pie 815]

Well the thing is, if it's OC in general that you wanted us to critique on, we need more details about your OC. At the moment, all I get from is that she is a baker. For instance, who is she? what does she do? What's her personality is like? What cutiemark has she got.? Something like that.

She is a young mare, called Pink Swirl, and she loves to bake bread, ect. She always gives peace to wherever she goes, and she loves to eat blue berrys. One younger brother, Sunora. She is just like Pinkie Pie, Nice, ect. Her Cutie Mark is bread with sprinkles.

*I got this information from my friend.*

So, now you may critique, like about the color, ect XDD

[Greyhawk 100]

She is a young mare, called Pink Swirl, and she loves to bake bread, ect. She always gives peace to wherever she goes, and she loves to eat blue berrys. One younger brother, Sunora. She is just like Pinkie Pie, Nice, ect. Her Cutie Mark is bread with sprinkles.

*I got this information from my friend.*

So, now you may critique, like about the color, ect XDD

 

I thought you dont want the drawing to be criticized. Coloring counts as drawing too.

 

Another question is, how did she discover her cutie mark and why does she always gives peace to wherever she goes?

[Slice0Pie 815]

I thought you dont want the drawing to be criticized. Coloring counts as drawing too.

 

Another question is, how did she discover her cutie mark and why does she always gives peace to wherever she goes?

I meant was, not the drawing, the OC's color, ect. Hard to explain.

She baked bread, said it tasted plain, added sprinkles, tried it, boom, cutie mark. *Don't ask me, got from friend who is next to me e.e*

She is  a kind mare, and wants the world to be at peace, and wants everypony to be happy

[Zygen 6,066]

Well, the only thing i really don't like that much is the speckled coat, i mean the dots i'm gonna be honest i'm not a big fan of on like 99% of ponies. Just a personal thing i guess.

 

Everything else is ok i think though.

[Silverwisp the Bard 2,353]

The design is nice (the flower is a neat touch).

Coloursheme is fine too, though I'd do away with the spots they're a bit hard on the eye (if you don't want a monotone coat, maybe make her a crystal pony). Consider making the manecolours less of a stark contrast.

 

As for the backstory, its serviceable but ot much more, maybe add some personal quirks hobbies ect. to flesh her out a little.