My Mlp Abridge series ep 1 release

[CaptainLuna 50]

Hey Guys so a month ago i posted here that i needed Voice actors for my new mlp abridge series. well anyway i just finished the first episode a few days ago and i thought that i should post it here and get some feedback. I'm new to abridging but me and the crew are going to keep doing it so any feedback or support would be helpful also we will need parts in the future if you want to try out. 

Link

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4wRuG0Q-y7E&feature=c4-overview&list=UU-QfUzVA1yQsF7IkMOHps7g

Im commanderfawkes by the way 

 

[Totally Ducklett 181]

Iz gud. Bootehfal vioc actin. 10/10 would watch again.

[Zhortac 1,474]

It's ok, for a start and first attempt.

 

Should work on the lip syncing, so it doesn't look like it's just dubbed over anything.

The audio could be cleaner. A pop filter is almost a must, and they're not expensive. You could use a sock, until you get one.

The intro is too long, could be shortened.

Some of the jokes are kinda cliche, try to keep those to a minimum.

[mars 4,862]

Hi! I love watching MLP Abridged series, so I have a quick couple of notes.

 

• The opening introduction to the Element of Harmony reminded me too much of a mix of Friendship is Witchcraft and Camaraderie is Supernatural. It isn't a bad thing, more of me just noticing that.
• The intro is really too long. I skipped over it.
• I was straining to hear Rainbow Dash, Rarity, and Fluttershy- either your music is way too loud or their voices are way too low.
• Wait, what is Pinkie Pie saying? I can't understand a word she says, and I'm not sure if it's funny or really weird.
• Try working more on lip-syncing. It'll really help. Even if you have to change a part of the script to make the joke fit with their lip movements.
• Some of the jokes fell sort of flat, but I guess that was too be expected- not every joke is hilarious. (One of my favorites was: "This is the last thing my mom ever gave me.")
• Your video editing could be better- more seamless. When you repeated clips, it made it seem a bit too awkward.
• I think you stuck a little bit too close to the original script. Don't be afraid to get creative. 

 

I still think it was really good for a first attempt, don't get discouraged! (Making science, making science~)

Edited February 15, 2014 by Creativity

[SharpWit 2,618]

I love the humor, but parts of it seemed to similar to the actual show, or other abridged series. interesting music choice, it's a bit too loud in some parts. but it's good

[Sonic Lightning 0]

Well, Fancy seeing you here roger xD

[Serbon div 386]

I love the intro lol. But it seems kinda generic.