http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Zfi0XI_uSfI
sorry. The title made me think of that song. Anyway, the story sounds odd to me. Scientists creating ponies and that are made into a evil world? For one, ponies are a real animal and it seems odd for people to make them even when they are real. You need to say what the difference between these and the ones down on the farm. Also you need to say what makes this world evil. To me it sounds like the world we live in. Just some more explain and detail is needed so people may start to like it.