My Little Dashie

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

I can't exactly remember when I first read it, but I didn't get emotional or anything. It was sad, but not that sad. Bubbles affected me a lot more, as well as this fic, which is one of the saddest fanfictions ever.

[An Old Head 4,816]

Looks like I'm the only one here who... yeah. Again.

 

My Little Dashie simply didn't work. I really have no idea how it got so much attention and, for that matter, acclaim. You spend about eight minutes reading about this narrator (seriously, the narrator has as much charisma as a toilet seat) spending time with Dash before suddenly it's time to go. Honestly, what's sad about it? If you spend so little time reading about their actual relationship - the wonky timeline jumps didn't help - you aren't going to feel any sympathy for the narrator because it's so damn come-and-go.

 

I'm not saying it's a bad fan fiction, but there are absolutely tons that are more touching - and better written.

[Alleviate 342]

Ahhhh, THIS fic...

Right, this fic...Well, I got 'round to reading it a short while ago, mainly 'cos a mate of mine was talking about it.

I had heard of it's apparent ability to make many bros just break down crying. And, well, I thought 'Naww, I'm never effected by these things, I'll be fine.' 

 

Well, affected we were. Aye. 'WE' were. 

 

I read it late at night, as I often do...Actually, thinking about it, it was probably just early morning. I'd imagine the tiredness was making the line blur a little. I have to say, by the end, I was feeling a little choked up, and I had let a single tear go. Aye, I realized it was actually somewhat like me, that the guy, he was, in a way, in my same situation. 

 

Anyway,  I went to sleep afterwards, thinking about it a bit. I was over it  soon enough, like, a few minutes later...Well...I thought so, anyway..

 

Next morning ('Twas half-term, so I was walking my dog early) Walking, walking, ooh, a leaf, walking, MOO LEAVE THE LEAF! walking, walking, Ooh, another thingy, ...Oh hi Dashie., walking, walking, walk- ! Hey...Wait a sec....

 

Yeah, basically, I had somehow, accidentally created another Tulpa. Yup. Dashie. ...Wow..Made my day...'Twas a good day, and she's been here ever since, slowly slipping out of her fic-defined profile, becoming more of herself. 

 

Well, I ramble. I'll shut up now. 

[DoctorWhovian1902 596]

Since it seems alright to share some feelsy stories here, here's mine:

 

My parents were gone for the day, and I was home alone bored. I hadn't watched MLP prior to this and was too worried to do so because it would mean I was a Brony, and there'd be no going back from there. Anyways, I had heard about this story through a few YouTube comments on clips from the show, and I thought I'd give it a shot.

 

I read the story through, but I held myself back from crying (I didn't feel comfortable with having cried because of a story, so I didn't). I must say this, though, the story got me closer to tears than anything had for a long time. That day, after an initial mental battle with myself, I watched the show and loved it.

 

And that's how I became a Brony.

[Callisto 1,877]

*Insert "oh, it's this thread again" image*

 

I dislike My Little Dashie. Very strongly. For one, it doesn't work on the most basic level. The very concept is, well, STUPID. You honestly expect me to take a story about a magical cartoon horse coming into the real world SERIOUSLY? Then we got the mopey narrator, who does nothing but whine, be a usless jerk, and than whine again. Secondly, I'm just gonna agree with Flipturn on this point. The story has ZERO emotional impact whatsoever. We read about Mr. Everything Sucks (AKA the narrator) and Dash for a while, then there's a stupid time skip, and then Dash leaves. Just, just why?

 

Of course, you can like My Little Dashie all you want. I won't hold anything against you. I just wanted to put in my two cents. Now, I shall await your hate mail.

Edited February 26, 2013 by Brother Callisto

[Argos 191]

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[MJNSEIFER 55]

I understand a lot of people don't like it (though I'm pleased to see some people do), but is my favorite fanfiction ever.  It has so much heart to it, and I could personaly identify with the characters.  There was crying involved, but they were a combination of emotions - there were some happy-tears mixed in with the saddness, I could litterally see it all in front of me, so I am sorry to say, I did find it well written, it was enough to affect me, and I never get emotional by reading.  Everything else, yes, but never reading.

[Zygen 6,066]

Hm I actually didn't cry while reading My Little Dashie. I got some emotions inside me and it made me feel kinda sad.  However no official tears. I guess My Little Dashie is a bit controversial as to whether its actually good or not, but I find it kinda weird that I didn't. Oh well .

 

I thought it was pretty good overall I guess, I read the whole thing . So I guess that says something atleast.

 

I've not really read much fanfics though, so my opinion on them is probably kinda not very experienced . I've read My Little Dashie and one other fanfic that was some sad fanfic about Fluttershy, I haven't read any others though.

 

Probably going to read some others though, whenever I get around to it.

[Betez 1,734]

I'll be honest. The only mlp 2 fanfics (MLD is a fanfic, right?) I've read are Cupcakes and Rainbow Factory. Now I realize these are probably 2 of the worst MLP fanfics ever written. I guess I'll give MLD a read.

[GrooveBroove 680]

It was more impactful reading with this in the background.

 

Still didn't cry though, however i did think it was pretty good for what it was.

[Scootaloodle 1,623]

*Insert "oh, it's this thread again" image*

 

I dislike My Little Dashie. Very strongly. For one, it doesn't work on the most basic level. The very concept is, well, STUPID. You honestly expect me to take a story about a magical cartoon horse SERIOUSLY? Then we got the mopey narrator, who does nothing but whine, be a usless jerk, and than whine again. Secondly, I'm just gonna agree with Flipturn on this point. The story has ZERO emotional impact whatsoever. We read about Mr. Everything Sucks (AKA the narrator) and Dash for a while, then there's a stupid time skip, and then Dash leaves. Just, just why?

 

Of course, you can like My Little Dashie all you want. I won't hold anything against you. I just wanted to put in my two cents. Now, I shall await your hate mail.

 

What's it about?

 

I've heard bits about it, and from what I can gather it kind of looks like a story about some brony who finds Rainbow Dash as a filly in a box or something. It might be good but it sounds a bit strange, but haven't read it so can't judge

Edited February 26, 2013 by Asherdangerdash

[Sanic Screwdriver 345]

Well my eyes teared up but tears did not run down my face. The only media that has made me cry I think was Marley and me. I didn't see the movie just the end of it. I knew what was happening but tears did run down my face. While reading My little dashie the ending was spoiled for me and I was prepared and waiting for it to hapen so that might have something to do with it though. Still it's very sad.

[Callisto 1,877]

What's it about?

 

I've heard bits about it, and from what I can gather it kind of looks like a story about some brony who finds Rainbow Dash as a filly in a box or something. It might be good but it sounds from what I know about it which isn't much a bit embarassing and silly to be honest

It's about a guy who's all depressed because everything sucks (his hometown is described as LITERALLY BEING GRAY). He watches FiM to help him get through his troubled times, which many people actually do, and FiM certainly cheers a lot of people up. He longs to be in Equestria, than suddenly Rainbow Dash. There is 0 explanation as to how this works.

 

Do you want me to tell you the rest, or do you not want any spoilers?

[Thundershock 310]

This is a pretty good but yet sad fanfic (good for my reading i had to do for homework )I did'nt cry during the fic but i almost did.

[firesoxs 93]

I will abmit that it is very sad. I've never read it but I did listen to the dramatic reading by mic the microphone. I didn't cry, I weept.

[Shawn Parks 1,798]

I am the crying type.  I listened to a dramatic reading of "My Little Dashie" on YouTube, and it made me bawl hysterically.  Months later, I read a comic book version, and it happened again.  

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

Well time for your ever loving and useful (for useless see Luna) Princess to chime in with her royal (and thus only valid) opinion...

 

 

it sucks

 

 

(tololololo)

[Mand'alor Dash 2,224]

I've been known to get emotional over a good story. The ending of Fallout: Equestria, for instance, still tears me up to this day. Heck, the mere thought of some of the moments in that fic are enough to get the waterworks flowing.

 

MLD did not, at any point, impress me in the slightest. It felt more like it was bludgeoning me over the head with a mallet and ordering me to cry than it was trying to deliver an actual story.

 

Additionally, Dash was seriously out of character, the human character was as bland as cardboard, and nothing ever actually happened until the end.

 

I love a good fanfic, but MLD was not a good fanfic.

[MOX News 7]

I dislike My Little Dashie. Very strongly. For one, it doesn't work on the most basic level. The very concept is, well, STUPID. You honestly expect me to take a story about a magical cartoon horse coming into the real world SERIOUSLY?

 

 

I think it's fine for a critical reason. The entire time, no one else knows about Dash, and at one point the narrator says he's a "closet brony." Therefore, Dashie can be seen as a metaphor for the show as a whole, and how it was stumbled upon midst the gloom of life.

 

 

Months later, I read a comic book version

 

I'd appreciate a link to that.

 

 

 

I read

the story through, but I held myself back from crying (I didn't feel

comfortable with having cried because of a story, so I didn't). I must

say this, though, the story got me closer to tears than anything had for

a long time. That day, after an initial mental battle with myself, I

watched the show and loved it. And that's how I became a Brony.

 

That's what happened to me too.

Edited February 26, 2013 by MOX News

[NavelColt 22,881]

Oh god!    That is the most i have cried in 5 years. I just read it and that is the first time i have ever cried from text. That is just the saddest thing ever. 

 

Ello', OP :3 I've merged your thread, 'My little dashie', with our official 'My Little Dashie' thread, that's for discussing the fanfic in general.

[Eragonrde12 49]

I've never read any fanfic before (except magneto, does that count?) So... I'll read this later, it seems good. I would read this now, but... I'm busy currently, just procrastinating on the forums here.   Also, that picture of baby RD in a box is adorable .

[Dreadmallon 353]

I read it to my friends, who have judged all fanfiction of the horrible, and all-time worst, fanfiction named My Immortal, and I shed tears, as I had not read the story before. Little did I know that they left the room (this was over Xbox, mind you). I suppose it's understandable, as I had read to them Cupcakes previously.

[VelvetDivan 96]

I gave it a read last night, and while I don't think it's utter trash like some have stated, it is an uncomplicated story.  Whether it was written specifically to pull on heartstrings, or just to provide a fantasy-space for the author is debatable.

 

It's true the narrator isn't well-described.  He's almost as bland as the town he inhabits.

 

The time-jumps feel like something the author observed in other works and adopted without much thought.  Because of them, Dashie grows up far too swiftly, and nearly all the bonding and character development that's hinted at is lost, so we have no investment in either character when the inevitable parting comes.  Well, obviously some people still grew attached or the story wouldn't be as popular as it is.  

 

The decision to keep the story relatively short may be a creative decision based on the short attention span the author expects of his demographic.  Just...throwing that out there.    For some of us it's less a matter of attention-span and more of time management.  We only have so much free time, and we sometimes must be miserly in how we dole it out.

 

My Little Dashie lacks a good hook at the start, and drags out at the end, two mistakes in story writing.

 

I don't really mind the concept of a cartoon pony transplanted into the real world.  It's not a new concept, slapping animated characters in the midst of real ones, after all.  Who Framed Roger Rabbit?

 

I hope, more than anything else, that the story encourages you to try writing something of your own.  You may find it very frustrating, but keep at it.  You may despair when you post something you're proud of and you don't receive much (if any) feedback, but that's almost always the divide between authors and artists in fandoms.  Stories take time and effort to read, while art can be appreciated at a glance.

[Shawn Parks 1,798]

My Little Dashie lacks a good hook at the start, 

 

 

I am planning to write a fanfiction that has some similarities to "My Little Dashie."  I have been wondering about how to start the story.  Right now, I don't really have an idea for a "hook" at the beginning.  

 

I have heard some people complain that they do not like "My Little Dashie" because it is a wish fulfillment type story.  But it is unclear to me why that is a bad thing.  

[VelvetDivan 96]

I am planning to write a fanfiction that has some similarities to "My Little Dashie."  I have been wondering about how to start the story.  Right now, I don't really have an idea for a "hook" at the beginning.  

 

I have heard some people complain that they do not like "My Little Dashie" because it is a wish fulfillment type story.  But it is unclear to me why that is a bad thing.  

 

Wish fulfillment isn't such a bad thing, but a glaringly obvious Mary-sue (lonely closet brony in this case) is going to attract criticism, even if you write it that way intentionally.  If you can handle the criticism then go with it, but I would encourage folks to establish distance between themselves and their characters.  Imbue them each with an aspect of your own character perhaps, amplified.

 

Writing a good hook is difficult.  If you don't get it into the first sentence, it ought to at least be in the first paragraph.  I think the best advice I can offer here is to read, and see how other people have done it.

 

Here's a post with a few links to helpful things, http://hermajestyhelps.tumblr.com/post/43157270102/masterlist-of-writing-help-for-writers