@@Pulchritude,
I adore her colour scheme! I don't seem to see too many white ponies around, and the braids are a lovely touch. Basically, I think her design is perfect. No need for changes there.
I think I remember reading her backstory with the lice before you changed it. I will concur with the others in that the 'magical mane' meant the lice disaster was too easy for her to overcome, but I'm a little saddened to see you scrapped the lice story altogether. I thought it had great potential as a possible cutie-mark story. Just think -
A lice infestation hits Longlock's hometown when she is just a filly. Longlocks, with her beautiful, squeaky clean mane, comes down with a terrible infestation. Nothing will budge them and her mother, with no other options, can only suggest cutting her beautiful mane off to rid her of the lice. Longlocks is completely horrified and runs away, determined to get rid of the lice her own way. Using everything she knows about the various shampoos her mother uses at the salon, she gathers a bunch of natural flowers and herbs and creates a shampoo which cures the lice problem completely. Ecstatic, she shares the shampoo with the rest of the town, gaining her cutie mark in the process. From that moment forward, she knew she was destined to be a manestylist, caring for the manes of other ponies.
That would still work with the newer backstory you have, which could be after she left home to pursue her dream. Both of them together would give her a nicely fleshed-out story. :grin2: