Could somepony read over my script?

[Lunar Red 92]

Recently I wrote a script and wanted to know what you think of it?

 

Vinyl Scratch: Good Evening, Ponyville, Its your favorite DJ here, Vinyl.

Rainbow Dash: And the best flyer in Equestria.

Vinyl Scratch: And this is the DJ-PON3 Interviews

Vinyl Scratch: Okay, Rainbow Dash. Are you ready to start?

Rainbow Dash: Ready? I was born Ready!

Vinyl Scratch: Okay, First Question, Who's your favorite Wonderbolt

Rainbow Dash: Well, you see f I had to choose, I'd probably pick Soarin.

Vinyl Scratch: Hey, RD, Who's your best friend besides the outside of the mane 6.

Rainbow Dash: I would say Gilda or Lighting Dust, but they turned out to be jerks. Other than them I'd say Derpy, even thou she can be a clutz, she is great friend, and is really nice

Vinyl Scratch: Do you have a "speacial" somepony

Rainbow Dash: What?!? No, well not yet.

 

 

I'm open for suggestions and/or questions to ask RD 

Edited January 5, 2013 by Saint. Red

[Sunbro 4 Lyfe 939]

ask two questions

"Now you know rainbow Dash!"

I think it may need to be a bit longer. and, what is this script for? a game? a video or animation?

[Colt 555]

I can see rainbow saying "Ready? I was born ready" on line 5

 

You need more than 2 questions, try to take her off guard like those jerks from the media. Do you have a special somepony?, How was your fist flight?, Have you taste the rainbow?... this segment is brought to you by Skittles... stuff like that

Edited January 5, 2013 by Colt

[Broccoli 127]

"Rainbow Dash: Well, you see f I had to choose, I'd probably pick Soarin."

 

For "Weel, you see f<--- I believe you may have wanted to say if. 

 

 

Otherwise, a neat little script   What's it for by the way?

[Lunar Red 92]

This is for DJ-PON3 Talk Show, and thanks for the suggestions I'll post the updated script when its done. The reason for its shortness is I was going ask what questions should Vinyl ask RD.