IceBeerG

I've faced the problem (Not exactly becouse of my fiction was long, but also due to my poor english) and will give you one advice - get proof-reader as soon as possible. Some of ponies suggest to finish story before showing it to anyone, but sometimes large ammount of text can push them away. So better to get a proof-reader, who can work on you during the process of writing fiction.

I'm not sure how i have to write it here. Well... If you are going to write it on russian, there will be "zemlia" for ground and, "voin" for warrior. That is how i will write this russian words using english alphabet. Althouth it pronouniated a bit different. It a pitfall for me, but i would try to say it correctly - for ground it is going to be "zemlea" (with a short "e") and "voien" Since you need to use it for OC, i would most likely suggest to use first variant.

Had just re watch "Wakfu" first season. Cried as baby at last episode. Some things never changes, no matter how often do you face them.

I guess i would like to take few (hundred) lessons of coding for dummies. Need someone who can guide me from very root, obviously.

sombra’s brother leaves him but sombra goes back to canterlot to learn more magic, but finds his master is just died Star Swirl the bearded didn't just die. He either disappear, and nopony know where he has gone (except maybe very few ponies), or was judged for smthg ( I doubt that, cuz it hard to explain dramatic change from loyal to betrayal, but its possible, and i don't know what exactly you have in plot) sombra becomes a student for Starswirl the Bearded, learning magic sombra gets angry sombra gets so angry that he goes back and destroys sombra them becomes enraged I don't think that Starswirl the bearded will teach someone, who get enraged so easily. He can be surprised, upset, or even confused, but cann't be just inexplicably evil. Especialy after part : sombra’s brother tells him that his father was an element of chaos(betrayal), but sombra gets so angry that he goes back and destroys his father and performs a memory spell on the guards If he was element of unhappyness (or whatever), why is he acting like this? I cann't find reason to kill his father. (according to what you has write above) discord finally explains that his powerful magic is coming from a crown he has(the element of dark magic) By all means its cann't be truth, otherwise Discord couldn't be a challenge for mane 6 (till he has no crown = he has no magic) sombra then travels to canterlot and sees princess celestia and luna defeat discord after he laughs he slips through the shadows and wanders equestria with his new power WHY??? "...he also finds many spells" How did he find this knowledge? Did he just waked up some morning and realised : "Oh, cool, know i know some new magic."? "...he looks upon it with utter hate and disgust." Why? His brother explains he is immune, but also explains the inner power that they both share (the horns of judgment and purge) his older brother eventually wins after a long battle, but cannot kill his brother instead he banishes him to the far north Wha? It is... I... *Sigh... Just please not a word about... "horns of judgment and purge"... Why is he immune? What the hay is somespecial about him that he is alone defeat elements of chaos (That by means more powerful then Discord), Why he cann't kill his brother? Why should him? Why didn't he get back elements? Why he banished him far north? Why if they are similar Sombra didn't used a thing - he had studied magic after all and know about it far more then his... well... undeveloped enough through spoilers brother. *Deep breath Celestia and luna appear and learn of the elements of chaos the brother explains what they are and that they must be kept away and guarded the brother volunteers to guard them, but also asks for them to put a spell on the holding keep that is far underground he also tells the sisters to tell the ponies that they defeated sombra and not him Why didn't Celestia and Luna banished him too, since he was one who dealed with Discord? Why Princesses, need him to guard them? Why did he ask to put spell on something underground (How did he even know that?), and not make it by himself? He had defeated elements of chaos after all. Why did he decide to tell others, that princesses defeated sombra? before he goes however; he turns into an alicorn (celestia did not do this) but she realizes that if he will not be the king of this empire, he then will be called its count NOOO! Why is he have to be turned in alicorn?? If so, why not before battle? (but by al means HE MUST NOT EVER EVER EVER EVER) --------------------------- There can be something really interesting, if you'll work hard on it, but please eradicate last ten points, and try to not overdo. But that is just my thoughts about it. Best regards.

How does it work? No, really, how does it work? I can understand inspiration come from reading, listetning, watching, sleeping, but how people can share they inspiration with others? I cann't hum to you, what i have in my head right now, as i don't know you interests. But i can suggest you to doing just whatever you like to do. Do you like movies? Go to cinema, maybe some scene will give you inspiration. Do you like reading? Read some book, and get inspired from it, and e.t.c.

AA is a lot of fun, but not so much as Bat rider. Opposing team : "Hey dudes gathering up together. They stand right after corner. Axe - you will blink there and taunt all of them. Nature prophet - you will teleport behind and hex their carry and... do whatever you can. After they did it Broodmother and me goes in. Sniper you... Where the hell sniper flew? o_O"

Excuse me, i dont think that exactly understand meaning of tutoring. Shall i call tutor if i dont understand some statement, or if i want to learn something new?

What we know about D3? There is bots for grinding paragon, trillions of gold that you'll never reach, constant bugs, disconects on hardcore server (that actualy caused my character to die) mobs that drops items absolutely irrelevant neiter for your class nor for any one else, auction for REAL MONEY!! once again bots that farm 24/7 items for auction for REAL MONEY!! Would i try diablo 3? Damn yes. I cannt pass it away after this trailer. Would i play diablo 3 after finish story line? Very unlikely.

Outfit - Robe like Medivh from Wc3 series wear. Why? Becouse it just too cool to ignore =) For the game mechanic i would like to freeze time for a short period For a weapon - meeech, i would like to do a magic, but guess is out of the rules so let say... i think that will be fine with one of two - generous collection of calebrated throwing knives or solid old (it is important to not be too ancient) staff... for no reason =)